One rusty razor, broken promises, Blood beading Across pale skin. How deep will she slice? How deep has She been broken? How far will she go Until it all Ends with no mercy? She hates what they made of her, an empty shell Of pain. Dizzyness, vomit, Pills cascading down her throat: She's waiting for Her end.
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clichéd.
This is sad, you can feel the emotion in it and there is some vivid imagery.
I only saw a few spelling errors. "Blood beadi" should be "Blood beading" I guess. Also I wonder if you maybe meant to type "slice" instead of "Alice". I've noticed that it's formated all in one block, but I wont criticize that because the same thing's happened on the last 3 things I wrote and no matter what I do in editing it, it just wont let me fix it to put in lines. It is very frustrating, but I think the reader can see where the line breaks are supposed to be from the capitalization, as far as I can see that all works fine. Thank you for posting, I look forward to reading more of your work.
~Ally-wa