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The Descent Chapter 10: The Kiss Part 4

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Full Novel Synopsis: Sequel to 'The Spiralling', itself a sequel to the Kick-Ass (2010) movie. However, this novel can be read on its own. After Big Daddy died, Mindy was driven mad, subdued by Dave, and locked away in an Institute after killing all who she deemed responsible but Dave. Will she recover? What will happen next to a New York without her nor the Motherfucker? Elements of the Kick-Ass 2 (2013) movie and comic series will be taken in.

The Descent

Chapter 10: The Kiss Part 4

16 June, 2011, Thursday

Dear Diary,

I kept having nightmares. Yesterday, I dreamt of an angel stopping many bad guys who wanted to hurt me. He was wearing green, and he had these two large guns on his back. Weird right? And he shot them down, because they wanted to shoot me. One of them had a… Giant gun, a big, black man in a suit. Like a bouncer. It wasn’t a nightmare, but it was loud and scary too, even when I was saved.

It was even worse today!

“You hate him, yes?” It was dark a girl spoke to me in the dark she sounded a lot like me. I was in purple tights, cape and boots again and I had guns in my hand I spun around and shoot behind me but there was nothing I hit nothing.

“No…” Who do I hate? What are we talking about? I couldn’t control myself but I agree with myself I don’t hate anyone not even the bullies it’s bad to hate.

“Yes, you do.” The girl who sounded like me spoke again I was afraid so very afraid I turned back front and fired again the guns I had on me were loud! Who is she? Who do I hate? A door opened and shut in front of me when I was fixing my guns they stopped firing I feel naked and scared.

I shot the door and kicked it open there was light underneath the door she must be inside but I didn’t want to fire the gun or kick things I wanted to run oh so much to just run away from this. There were even more guns inside and some of them were very huge it was scary but I don’t see anyone inside even when the door was opened and closed my guns were still up I can’t control it. I did the same thing to another door but the same room appears I’m so confused and I’m so scared. “What the fuck?” I used the f-word I didn’t even know it existed until now why did I use the f-word it is bad and wrong.

“Dave’s no different from the bad guys…” The voice said again from behind me so I turned around and saw no one but fired anyway maybe she’s behind the door I got scared what does Dave have anything to do with this I love him so, so much Dave is not a bad guy.

“Where are you!” I shouted and I sounded angry but I feel sad at the accusation Dave is not a bad man he’s my brother he took care of me made sure the bullies didn’t take my lunch money I looked everywhere even outside the window and shot at another door but there was nothing nothing at all I’m scared.

“Here.” The girl said again she was sitting behind a table, her legs were on the table how rude I thought I checked there before. I could barely turn when she shot me in the chest it was loud and it hurts IT HURTS so much the pain, but why didn’t die I thought I should die.

I wasn’t supposed to get hit daddy I’m so sorry I failed you you taught me so much and I wasn’t using everything I learnt. Mommy and daddy died for nothing I fell against the door I was shooting at I was leaning against it I can’t move anymore can’t get up the girl’s coming for me.

She was white all over and had red, red eyes she was scary looking. She wears black and silver, her boots were high ‘go away’ I wanted to say but my mouth wouldn’t move. “Didn’t expect me there, did you?” She said as she sashayed towards me like a runway model oh God why didn’t the vest protect me? I have a vest?

I reached for my gun again but the white girl stepped on my hand and pushed it away I think she broke my fingers it hurts so much Dave where are you I need you please it hurts. “No so fast, Hit-Girl…”

“Look’s like it’s my turn again…” She said after she crouched down to look at me close in the eye her eyes were red, oh so red and they were very scary I don’t want to look but I kept looking, and looking.

She grabbed the sides of my head and put her lips against mine kissing me young girls aren’t supposed to kiss each other that way NO not even Dave and Dad why no NO please I can’t stop her too weak it was disgusting she was even sucking the blood from my mouth stop please stop stop stop stop STOP!

“Stop! STOP!” I shrieked myself awake. I could feel snot coming down my face again, out of my nostrils but I knew it wasn’t snot. There were already tears down my cheek even before I started crying.

My door flew open and Dave was almost flying in. He was even holding this big, huge flashlight. Mag-lite – I remembered using that word. He looked like he was about to beat me with it, so I cried even more. He switched on the light and I panicked. I didn’t want him to see the blood. I covered my nose and mouth, but I was too slow.

“Mandy!” He shouted after me, and before I knew it, he was sitting on my bed. I didn’t know he could be this fast. Next, he had his hands on my wrists, but I didn’t want him to see the blood, “Let me see, Mandy.” I kept shaking my head. I didn’t want him to see but he kept pulling at me. I couldn’t keep up, “Mandy, let go.” He ordered me sternly. He was frightening me, and I knew he had already seen the blood, so I let go. Dad was also awake, standing by the door. They both saw it.

Later…

“What’s your nightmare about, Mandy?” Dave asked. It wasn’t even morning yet. I saw the clock in my bedroom when Dave was cleaning me up, and it said ‘0613’. We were already having breakfast when it was dark blue outside. I heard Dave’s question, but I was afraid to answer. My cheeks felt red and hot. All I remember was… “Mandy, please, I’m worried about you, you know.” Dave knew how to get me to open up. I can’t help but to keep looking at my bowl of cereal – it was a lot less harder to look at than their eyes.

“I remembered… Kissing.” I gave in in the end. How could I not? Dave wasn’t around as often anymore, but when he was, he did care. He was here with me right now. My cheeks turned redder, I could feel it.

“Who, Mandy? Was it a boy you saw at school?” Daddy asked. Dave said he would worry about things like that all the time, “Was it Pete?”

“No!” I squeaked immediately. Disgusting! He was only a friend – now I knew what Dave meant, “I don’t remember.” I lied. Again. Am I a bad girl? I didn’t want them to know that I dreamt about a scary girl my age kissing me. “I can’t remember anything else.” I was a liar. I remembered what the girls chanted when they didn’t believe I lost my memory. Liar liar pants on fire! Liar liar pants on fire! But I remembered – I was fighting. I was in pain and I had guns. I couldn’t help but shiver at the thought. I don’t know if Dave noticed me shivering. But he was looking at me.

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SpiritedWolfe
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Hello, Dark Raven!

Alright, I don't have that much to say in this chapter, aside from the stuff I mentioned with the last dream. (Aside from having to back track several times in the dream) there was really only one spot where I stopped myself and had to think, "Wait... this doesn't make any sense."

That one spot was where Mandy heard Mindy swearing. And it just so happened to be the F-Bomb. It was good that you had Mandy pause for a moment to think that it was a bad word and it shouldn't be said, but she specifically mentions she didn't know that it existed. Well, if she didn't know it existed, how would she be so sure as to know it shouldn't be said?

I'm quite curious as to why this kiss means so much. It's obviously a memory, but I'm really starting to question everything that's going on. And in a very good way! Perhaps it is that Demoness is only a part of Mindy because of that kiss? That somehow the two were two but became one and that's why Mindy went insane? So many possibilities.

Alright, so I'm guessing you are taking these memories and scenes from the movie and such, but I'm really wondering how Mindy just kind of let Demoness do this? She was at first firing at her and then she just becomes subdues and just stands there as if waiting for Demoness to do something. Why?

Really sorry that this is a shorter review, but there wasn't that much wrong with this chapter in the first place. Keep on Writing,
~Wolfare~

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Deanie
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Deanie wrote a review · Sat Nov 09, 2013 4:28 pm

Hallo,

Back again to keep on reviewing! Hmm, I don't have much to say on this chapter because well, I don't know what is really going on. I suppose this dream has something to do with her being Demoness and is more elaborated on in the Spiralling. Mandy did sound incredibly confused in her dream. Although one thing which was frustrating was the lack of commas and full stops. Previously in her diary entries Mandy's English was good enough to use them. So maybe she should here as well? It's not like she is writing this, more like feeling it and dreaming it, so it should be in regular text I think. No need to annoy the reader :)

I especially liked the ending because it's exactly how I thought Mandy would end up acting like. She would start talking, but then realize she sounded weird and stop.

There isn't really much I can review on! It looks like the perfect chapter to me, apart from the dreamy bit. Going on to read more :)

Deanie x

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Dreamy
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Dreamy wrote a review · Sat Nov 02, 2013 8:05 pm

Hi Dreamy here to review,

To be true, I have not seen Kick-ass.But it sounds interesting maybe I will catch up with it. I liked the way you narrated I know I would have said it many times but I couldn't just resist mentioning it. Because that's what keeps the readers accompanied and you are a good narrator. And off to point out the mistakes,

I feel naked and scared.


It's "felt"

but I feel sad at the accusation Dave


Again "felt"

it hurts IT HURTS


May be in this line you should avoid capitalizing those emotions because I feel like it is spoiling the actual emotions that the girl is going through.Other than that, this is a good piece and I liked it.Keep up your good work!

Keep writing!!!
Cheers!!! :D

Cool, thanks for the review, buddy!



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