Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language, violence, and mature content.
Full Novel Synopsis: Sequel to 'The Spiralling', itself a sequel to the Kick-Ass (2010) movie. However, this novel can be read on its own. After Big Daddy died, Mindy was driven mad, subdued by Dave, and locked away in an Institute after killing all who she deemed responsible but Dave. Will she recover? What will happen next to a New York without her nor the Motherfucker? Elements of the Kick-Ass 2 (2013) movie and comic series will be taken in.
The Descent
Chapter 14: Thy Will Be Done Part 1
26 June 2011, Sunday
Dave kept his promise. He said that he would read me a story during bedtime and he did. Last night, he sat beside me. He had this old book with him. He said that it was from the attic, and he loved it as a child. The book he read to me was ‘Little Red Riding Hood’. It was a great story. When the Big Bad Wolf tried to take Little Red Riding Hood, a woodsman came and saved her. But why can’t Little Red Riding Hood save herself?
I still had trouble sleeping after that. Dave stayed with me, sitting next to me. We weren’t talking, but I like it when it was just the two of us in a cosy room, even if we were quiet. But Dave fell asleep on the chair, and I still couldn’t sleep.
It took me an hour or two after Dave to sleep, because I was still thinking about what happened in the basement. Demoness wanted to hurt me, but the black knight saved me. But what was she trying to say? She asked if I am sure if Mandy was my name, and when I thought about it, it felt as if... My name didn’t seem familiar. It didn’t have the ‘Déjà vu’ feeling that Mrs Davies talked about. But what could my name be? Besides Mandy Lizewski? I don’t trust the Demoness.
But at least when I woke up, I don’t remember nightmares and I did not bleed. We went to church today, just like every other Sundays. It was after the service that I saw her again. Demoness. We were outside the church, because we were leaving. Demoness had a brown cloak wrapped around her, and boots for her feet. I knew it was her, because I saw the red eyes and white hair.
But she was looking at Sal Bertolinni. She didn’t seem to care about me. Was that a good thing? When I turned to look at Sal confusingly and then back to Demoness again, she was gone.
27 June 2011, Monday
I’m still having trouble sleeping. Last night, my poor Dave had to sleep in the chair again. I feel really bad about it. Yet I can’t help but to think about everything, about Demoness, about the black knight, about the odd feeling in my name, about everything Dave said. It felt as if things weren’t real anymore.
I could still remember the black knight, and the way his mouth moved. I had been trying to read his lips. I think I could make out a few words. I think they were: Don’t, and Dave. I said Dave’s name so many times that it wasn’t difficult when I think about it.
Yet I still can’t understand anything – it’s so frustrating! But when I think about it, it felt like the black knight was protecting me from Demoness, so I think he was asking me not to listen to Demoness, or go near her. But what was he trying to tell me about Dave?
Was it about the things he said? About how they didn’t feel real anymore? He seemed to be hiding something from me, and he was gone for so long these days. I wanted to find out everything. I want Dave back.
It was after school when I decided to find out more. As Dave got on his bike, he waved and told me to enjoy my time at Pete’s house. I was on my own bicycle, which was blue. Then Dave cycled off – when I asked him where he was helping people, he said that he was volunteering in the Good Samaritan Hotline. I didn’t know what it was, but I didn’t know if that was where he was going.
I lied. I lied to both Daddy and Dave. I wasn’t going to Pete’s house. I was going to follow Dave. I would feel sad whenever I lied, but it felt like something I had to do. Things did not feel right. I want Dave back.
I took off after him when he wasn’t looking. I was a little far from him, but I could still see him. Dave really knows how to ride a bicycle, so I had to pedal really hard to follow him. But he was too fast. He was further away after a while, after he made a turn, and in the next turn, he disappeared!
I had to go to Pete’s place in the end. But at least he’s made two more friends, Josephine and Mark, from a community centre, and when I came over, they were there. We played Monopoly together.
When I got back home, it was dinner time. After dinner, I went up to my room to do my homework. Then it happened…
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I was writing new words down, such as Uzi, manipulation and dreg. I couldn’t even understand most of them, and I couldn’t even find most of them on the dictionary either. Mrs Davies won’t even tell me what they were. She would just tell me to find some other words. When I had to do my math homework, I couldn’t concentrate anymore. I wish I could find out everything. I felt very upset.
“Aw… Feeling down now, are you?” It was then that Demoness came to my room. I didn’t even see her enter. She was like a ghost. I didn’t hear the door open. My window was, so she might have come through there. She was lying on my bed. She was no longer naked – she had a towel around her body. The black knight saved me from her, and I think he didn’t want me to go near her, so I didn’t. I stayed at my desk. I tried to ignore her, “The silent treatment? You’re becoming tougher, aren’t you?”
I could hear her coming closer. She got off the bed and walked towards me. I could hear her feet pattering on the floor. I couldn’t help but to cringe. I didn’t want her close to me, but she was stronger than me. I felt her hands on my shoulder, and her face pressing next to mine. It reminded me of Dave. He did that before. She was doing the same thing Dave did to me, but I didn’t like it. It made me angry. “Go away!” I shouted as I pushed my chair back and turned around, shaking her off. I was surprised when Demoness let go.
“Good. It’s good to be angry. It’s better than being a scared little girl!” She grinned and laughed as I was standing there. I could feel my hands going tight. I could feel my fists. But I didn’t know what to do. I wanted to run, but she was standing between me and the door, “All this for little old Dave Lizewski. You know, I can help you.”
“But why do you want to help?” I asked Demoness. It was hard, but I tried not to be afraid.
“We both want the same thing. You want Dave, so do I.” She said. I didn’t trust her. I couldn’t trust her. She wouldn’t let go of me in the basement.
“Why do you want Dave?” I was confused. I didn’t know that Demoness knew Dave. Demoness laughed when she heard my question. I could hear her so clearly. She was close to me, but not close enough to touch me.
“Silly girl. You do know that I’m your guardian angel, do you?” Demoness said. What she said made sense – how else could she get in the house that way? And then get out so quickly? But she didn’t look like a guardian angel in the basement, “That’s why I’m heavenly white! I want Dave so that you could… have him.”
“Listen, I know I scared you in the basement.” Demoness continued. She sounded convincing. She was explaining everything away, “but I was cold, wet and I was in pain. It hurts to be born again.” Born again? Like being a Christian? Was the Demoness trying to trick me? I knew she wasn’t trying to hurt me, because she was stronger than me. I knew she won’t harm Dave or Daddy, because she could have done that anytime.
“Okay…” I finally said. Demoness smiled when I agreed, but I didn’t like her kind of smile. It didn’t seem like the same kind as Dave’s and Daddy’s or even Pete’s when they smiled, “You can help…”
“Here, sit down right next to me.” Demoness was in my bed again, and she was inviting me to her. She was patting the spot she wanted me to sit. I didn’t want to at first, but I sat right next to her in the end. I was afraid, but at the same time I wanted her to help me. I felt her arm around my shoulders and her head leaning on mine. She felt light, but strong. “You’re following Dave to where he’s going, right?” How did you know about my plan? Were you watching me?
“Yes…” I said, but I was more worried about the way Demoness was touching me. She was so close to me that I could feel her breathing.
“But you’re too slow.” Demoness said. I remembered when I lost Dave. I felt sad then, “Well, it’s easy, really.” She started putting her fingers on my thigh. I was shocked, but I felt her arm around my shoulder, and I didn’t want to move in case she gets angry or upset. With her finger, she seemed to be drawing a map for me to follow.
“This is Dave. He took a few turns.” I could feel her finger sliding around my thigh, like the way Dave was cycling. It felt wrong and… Mrs Davies would call it ‘perverted’. She didn’t feel like a guardian angel, yet… she was helping me, “So why don’t you scurry across the neighbourhood before he leaves…” She walked her fingers across my thigh. I felt like crying, but I didn’t want to lose to her, “and wait here for him to pass, then follow him again?”
“Oh, and by the way, do you have a hairclip?” The Demoness asked, but at least her fingers were no longer on my thigh.
“Yes…” I took the Hello Kitty hairclip Daddy bought me out of my hair. My hair fell back over my ear. Why would I need a hairclip?
“Pull it apart.” The Demoness told me. I didn’t listen to her this time. I didn’t want to break my Hello Kitty hairclip. My Daddy bought it for me. Demoness’ arm was still around my shoulder. I felt trapped.
“No.” I looked away from her. I didn’t want to do it, but at the same time I was frightened of her. I wasn’t looking at her eyes, but I could imagine them staring at me, “Daddy bought it.”
“You’ll need it to find Dave. Pull it apart.” She told me again. I was expecting her to shout at me, or hurt me, but she was very calm. For some reason, it sent a shiver down my spine. Instead, I felt Demoness’ entire hand on my thigh. I hate it when she does things like that! I remembered dreaming of her now. I remember her kissing me. I felt like throwing up, “You know, I can be here all night… I’m a very, very patient guardian angel…” Her hand was cold, burning into my thigh. I could feel her stroking it. I felt sick. I wanted so much to cry, to call Daddy, but Demoness was there. I pulled my hairclip apart. Hello Kitty’s face fell off.
“Good girl.” Demoness removed her hand from my thigh. I still couldn’t breathe. This was when I realised that I was aching – I was so tense when she was around. “Now, I can’t remember where Dave’s going, but wherever he is going, there’s going to be a locked door. You know how to pick a lock, right?” I shook my head. I didn’t even know what she meant by picking locks. I didn’t even want to look at her. She was… perverted. “Don’t worry, you’ll know.”
“Well, I gotta run, sweetie.” The Demoness was finally leaving. But I still didn’t want to breathe too hard. I felt her planting a kiss on my cheek before standing up. I didn’t even want to look at her. “You’ll thank me when you have him.” She disappeared before I was brave enough to look at her again. I couldn’t help but to cry in bed after that. It was difficult for me to sleep later. I could still feel her hand on my thigh even when Dave was reading me a story, even when it was 2 o’clock, and Dave had fallen asleep beside me.
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Hey, Dark Raven!
Another really creepy chapter you have here, watching it all relapse. Now, I'll tell you now that this will be a short review since I have very, very little to say. There weren't even any notes this time, since I became so engrossed in the story.
One thing that threw me off was the leading line from Mandy's diary to the rest of the narration. It really loses the tension, ruins the surprise, of Demoness appearing once again. Since you're prepping us for what's supposed to come, the actual action doesn't feel as exciting. Yes, I get that it's Mandy's diary entry, but I doubt she'd be so ominous. She'd straight out say what was going on.
Is the how the old Mindy was Demoness? As her guardian angel? Is Demoness a different part of Mindy's mind, actually, or something completely different? It worries me, because I can really see little Mandy falling to Demoness's tricks. What I wonder is how does Demoness know all this? How does she get this stuff? Is she really a guardian angel gone twisted?
A random little thought I had was perhaps all of this is all wrong? Perhaps, Mandy is the right one and that Dave does deserve to die for whatever reason? He keeps mentioning that its his fault that all this happened, but he never specifies why. What does on in the world of Dave that he hides from us readers?
That's all I have. Just, I do find it interesting that you flip back and forth between diary and action so often, it can sometimes be offsetting. Even the perspective switches. Since it's right in the middle of the chapter, the transition isn't as smooth as it can be because sometimes we aren't concluded with what is happening in the other character's world (and when we are it should usually be a chapter break, as I've mentioned before.)
Keep on Writing,
~Wolfare~
Hello D4RKR4VEN! CHRISSY321 here with another review!



*Happy Review Day!*
I loved this story! All of the detail was great and added lots of detail! I love reading that on here, because it is so wonderful! Detail is everything, some people use some, and some people use none, and the difference is the greatness of the story.You my friend are one who uses TON of detail!
There is one thing I would fix, and only because it did not make sense to me:
The final the dots you put at the end made no sense to me- I think you should take them off, or put them in a mrs appropriate place! Sorry if I sound rude- but that is just my opinion!
Overall I just loved the plot of the story, the way it had so many twists and turns, the mysterious fairy god mother- it all just made a really good story that kept me at the edge of my seat! That is great my friend, and can be hard for some readers.I usually only feel this way with real good published books that I love to devour- and the fact that you did it AMAZES me! *Bows*
I greatly encourage you to keep writing!