Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language, violence, and mature content.
Full Novel Synopsis: Sequel to 'The Spiralling', itself a sequel to the Kick-Ass (2010) movie. However, this novel can be read on its own. After Big Daddy died, Mindy was driven mad, subdued by Dave, and locked away in an Institute after killing all who she deemed responsible but Dave. Will she recover? What will happen next to a New York without her nor the Motherfucker? Elements of the Kick-Ass 2 (2013) movie and comic series will be taken in.
The Descent
Chapter 6: God’s Face Part 2
Later that Night…
Sneaking out of my room, I peeked into Mindy’s to make sure she was asleep, and sure enough, she was there, tucked in by my dad. She’s had a pillow over her eyes. It wasn’t the first time. When I asked her about it a few days ago, she said it was for covering her eyes, as she was a little afraid of sleeping alone. I was surprised that she hadn’t asked to sleep in with me or my dad – at least in that way, her courage wasn’t entirely lost. Her room was still a dull brown. Dad had already bought the paint, but we hadn’t done the painting. We’d already planned something for it, but that would be in the weekends.
Going further down the corridor, I unlocked the hatch to the attic and went up to my treasure trove. The attic was hardly ever cleared up, and as a result there were stacks of boxes as high as the roof, some of which had fallen over. Memories were stored up here, like my comic books and figurines. But something else wasn’t going to remain a memory for long…
It took me a while to figure out where I’d put my Kick-Ass costume, but it came back to me quick enough. At the other end of the attic from where I was, my life-long collection had a corner to itself, a huge corner. A whole bookshelf of comics, and leaning on it was the luggage. Dialing the passcode, I opened it up, and there inside, it lay: A pair of yellow gloves and boots, the scuba suit that had stayed with me for quite a while, the helmet, utility belt and vest. I had a pair of tasers. Oh dude, that is one gay looking taser... A ghost whispered into my ear, the ghost of Mindy’s past.
Then there’s the batons – I could never forget the batons. Taking the sticks up, I was mesmerised by my own weapon, I had to touch it. The batons had clunked the head of many a villains. Yet, I also remembered – it was used on me and Big Daddy, back when we were nearly executed. Never again, a side of my head thought. Yeah, of course, because Big Daddy’s dead, the other side countered. There was still blood on the green batons – It was Mindy’s blood, when I took her down in a combo. I remembered it all so clearly…
Like a reflex, I swung my baton against her just above the waist. I was even able to surprise myself when she stumbled in that direction.
'That's it' I thought, 'this is my ticket out. This is everyone's ticket out.' I was encouraged, and I swung my baton against her again. This time it landed just below her left armpit. I could hear a crack- it was either my weapon or her rib, "That was for Michael!" There was only one way to find out.
Like some fighter in a weird martial arts video game, I was doing a combo- I went for another swipe in the opposite direction, winding myself up fully, "And that was for Aldan!"
Demoness could not react at all before the stick connected with the side of her head and, as if we were in some Chinese movie, she spun in mid-air from the force I exerted on her before landing on the hard ground, finally floored, "That- that was for Mindy!"
I found out too late that Demoness was Mindy. After brutalising her with my batons, I wasn’t done yet with my stupidity. I started interrogating her. Got angry when I thought she wouldn’t tell, and it went out of hand. Before I saw past her disguise, I threatened her with a pistol, I’d pistol whipped her twice, choked her to within an inch of her last breath. I’d punched her in the guts a few times, slammed her against walls, slapped her, and kicked her a painful many times. I hurt her so bad – broke a few bones, bled her out. Had Mindy died that day, I would have joined her, no questions asked.
“Oh, Mindy… I’m so sorry for everything…” I whispered, feeling an old friend creeping down my cheeks as I was hugging my batons, hugging Mindy’s year-old dried blood. I looked at my main weapons again – and held them tighter, “Never again.” I promised myself that I wouldn’t make the same mistakes again.
A while later…
I did the usual rounds, walking the beat, except I knew vaguely where the hotspots were. As I was just out of retirement again, I decided to just avoid the hotspots for the day. But who am I kidding? Of course I went for the hotspots!
But even the hotspots were quieter these days. With the whole city cowboying up and even producing superheroes like Marvel, muggers and pervs were having a run for their money, at least at first. Knowing human nature, crime would surely go off the charts once things’d reached a new equilibrium. I knew I was stubborn, always going back into my wet suit. It won’t take long for the bad guys to reach for their knives once again, and that’s why we still have superhero comic books even after humanity’s been at it for a million years.
For an hour or two, all I did was to attract smiles and encouragement. At least I knew the people wanted me back. I was hi-fiving so many times, my arms were starting to ache even before I’d taken down my first villain of the night. At least I knew I’d need to do some upper body exercises so I could hi-five and fight crime more.
Another hour or two passed. My feet were getting sore – I’d need to get used to foot patrols again. There was no crime to be fought tonight. Still, I wasn’t discouraged. Sure, the fall of the D’Amico empire has had every criminal lying low and superheroes popping up, but the Mindy… Demoness’d done quite some damage to the police force to balance it out. To get to Detective Gigante for collaborating with Frank D’Amico, she massacred police officers in their own headquarters. To get to Angie D’Amico and her lieutenants, she went through an army of police officers, again. As Demoness, Mindy was a force of nature, and she left the NYPD demoralised. Some officers ended up quitting; others migrated to other services, such as the fire department or hospitals, and there weren’t enough freckle-faced new recruits joining, even after all that free advertisements superheroes like me gave. I can’t say I blame them though. You don’t get almost a hundred dead police officers within the space of hours every day. It must have felt like the end of times for them.
After the clock struck 3 without someone striking me, I knew it was time to knock off.
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Hey, Dark Raven.
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But she so will xD It's kind of a nice touch here, showing how she is versus what she will be :3 Because I totally haven't read ahead to discover this book. Nope.
THANK YOU! For I'm not sure how long, I've been practically begging you for a moment to go back and just have Dave think about what had happened back with Mindy and how she was Demoness, and was it so totally worth it. It was interesting to see the memory finally flashing into Dave's head and how it effected him.
And the way you finally were able to incorporate into the story that this is the city of New York really made this chapter shine for me. However, there was still something missing. It felt still kind of empty and just not as full as those beginning chapters. It's still well written, enough to hold my attention, just not the same as when the emotion was layered on to the narration and Dave's voice is starting to falter
I noticed specifically that the very first paragraph just felt scattered, talking about how she was sleeping to how her room looked? The flow there didn't go between the sentences and the switch was abrupt. Plus, why do we need to know how her room looked at this specific point and time.
Final thing that confused me was right after the transition (which totally feels like those comic books with the feel, so nice job). The wording in that sentence doesn't make very much sense. What is walking the beat? Please make this more clear on what's going on. I can kind of get that he wants to stay off the normal roads where the most crime usually is, but the wording is strange.
Can't wait to read more! Keep on Writing,
~Wolfare~
Hola!

Wow.. I never knew how bad it had been with Mindy being Demoness until now. I didn't know that Dave had beat her up himself to the point of almost killing her. It would've been like what those thugs did to him and Big Daddy, he did to Mindy and that must've cut deep. Looks like they all have a deeper and twisted history than I though. I'm not surprised Mindy was sent to the institute after that.
...as well as the fact that she mass murdered a lot of policemen. How much damage could that little girl do who was once a superhero? It just proves that when you go from good to bad... the damage can be fatal.
This chapter has picked up quite a bit from the rest of the chapters. It speeds up the pace a little and hooks the reader back in with all this pre-history in there which was deeply intriguing. So I guess as a writer you didn't fall into the boring category at all. You've kept the whole story at an even pace in a good way. So, no, not a boring or too slow story anymore. And I'm looking forwards to seeing more of the superhero Dave and possibly the meet and greet of Doctor Gravity as well. Looks like that could be a new character to toy with.
So we go from emotional history looking at Dave to patrolling Dave to unfit Dave and to tired Dave and all these small transitions happen smoothly and naturally. Good job there ^^ I like seeing pieces of writing where everything just seems to fit, like the story was already there and you're just writing it out. It doesn't sound forced or unnatural or unrealistic at all. Which is great. And mentioning the high-fives would an extra special touch
Deanie x
Hey there! Told you I would get some of these done! Ha- just got back from driving in the horrid rain storm... I thought I was going to die! Anyways, lets get to it!
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Again, just a reminder. This is just about the grammar parts, I will get to your lovely character analysis in the over all section of my lovely review, ha-
To me, this sounds like a comma-splice. I could be wrong but I would look it up just in case.
Great job right here! I know my review doesn't show that it is italicized but it is. I love it!
I was always told that you can't just use a number and that you have to write out the word form unless it is over one hundred. So here, I would just make sure to use "three" instead.
Over all
Alright... A few questions....
Why did he go back to being the super hero? :O I mean, does he really feel like that is the best option?! :O You have totally thrown me off on what I was thinking that was going to happen... You are so awesome!! *hearts* Seriously, I see no flaw in the characters, though I was surprised that you are letting him go back out on the streets as a super hero. I can't wait to see what happens next!
~Knight Onyx
Thanks for the review. I'm surprised that Dave going back out as a superhero would surprise you, but then again you're going into this a Kick-Ass virgin, so I guess it's expected. Thanks for the review!