Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language, violence, and mature content.
Full Novel Synopsis: Sequel to 'The Spiralling', itself a sequel to the Kick-Ass (2010) movie. However, this novel can be read on its own. After Big Daddy died, Mindy was driven mad, subdued by Dave, and locked away in an Institute after killing all who she deemed responsible but Dave. Will she recover? What will happen next to a New York without her nor the Motherfucker? Elements of the Kick-Ass 2 (2013) movie and comic series will be taken in.
The Descent
Chapter 6: God’s Face Part 1
After dropping off Mindy back home, I was supposed to head back out and do my cardio regime, but something was bothering me. The Buzzard. As unspectacular as he was, he’d struck a match in me leading to my superhero powder keg. I’d been on hiatus (for the most part) for the past year, and now I had Mindy to look out for. I had to keep her out of everything even vaguely related to her past as Hit-Girl – To become Kick-Ass again would risk Mindy losing it again. Seeing me in costume might as well be a shortcut to her vendetta.
“Go to your room and rest, Mandy.” I lead her gently in the direction of her room. She gave me a sweet smile, indicating her understanding. In the meantime, I had something else in mind, “Shower at 7 and come back to me for a new bandage, okay?”
“Okay…” Mindy replied in her usual meekness and went to her room.
I went into mine. I made sure the door was shut for what came next. Sitting behind my desk with my desktop computer before me, I started searching for superheroes who were still active. Unsurprisingly, the Buzzard was one of them. Then there was this scantily-clad woman with what looked like a modified pool cue, calling herself the Nightbitch. One of the most unconventional names I’d ever heard of. The next name that came up on Google was an African-American physics professor who calls himself Doctor Gravity. His logo was a white Rutherford-Bohr atom – I somehow remember that term in school – with 3 electron orbits around the nucleus. He seemed very serious about his role with his red-and-white uniform and what was introduced on his Facebook page as the Zero-G Device. It was silver and sleek with some pink LED and a matching glowing keypad near the handle. After some thoughts, I accepted it as a real device – with superheroes roaming the streets, everything else sure wasn’t far off. Hey, it’s already 2011.
Ever since Mindy was put in an asylum, I’d been a recluse to the Superhero world. I was always alone, even when there were talks on the internet about teaming up. I’d never watch the news for the past year, and I didn’t even bother with the internet much. ‘Superhero’ was a word that disappeared from my list of search terms. Now that I feel like going back out there, I would have to start from the ground-up once again. I couldn’t help but to think of Hit-Girl, and Big Daddy, and what could have been. I’d killed my own career as Kick-Ass, not that that was what I was thinking when the latter was burning alive. I couldn’t help but to think that I had done more harm than good. The Father-and-Daughter duo would have been fine without me, especially Mindy. The innocent lives that had fallen to her insanity were blood on my hands just as much.
Looking around my room, I realised just how bare it was. Before Mindy came in, it was absolutely cluttered, the walls full of posters, the shelves comic-books Even the bed and floor was padded with them. Now, it was just a void. It was just brown walls and plaster. With all the extra time I had freed up from being a comic connoisseur, there was even time for me to do some spring cleaning. Now, my room resembled something out of a cheap motel. It was bare, Spartan without the muscles. Somehow, it became an imagery for where my life was heading. I didn’t want it to be filled with nothing and regret. I didn’t want it to be depressingly silent, lonely. Kick-Ass it is. I’ve decided officially there and then to make a comeback.
If Mandy had been Mindy, I would have tried teaming up with her, if she would even want to, considering that it was my fault she lost the ultimate team in the first place – her and her dad. Now, I would have to start scouting again, or, like Big Daddy and Hit-Girl, let them come to me. I reopened the superhero profiles.
There were no other superheroes on the first page. For the time being, they were the most talked-about of them all. Between the 3 of them though, I trusted Doctor Gravity the most. I’d already seen the Buzzard, and Nightbitch sounded… off. After refreshing the search page, I saw Hacksaw and The Enforcer, but they didn’t look like team players. They must have read either Batman or The Punisher.
Doctor Gravity, hands down. I sent him a message on Facebook, told him my intentions about meeting up. It wasn’t as easy as I first thought it would be. I had to get into the Kick-Ass feel again, and my message had to be awesome enough to reflect that. The last few forum entries and chat I saw of Kick-Ass were of people remembering me as the first who started it. It was historically untrue, as Mindy and her father were already kicking Mafia ass big-time, but it was close enough. Somehow, my message had to reflect that. I became engrossed with that one message when…
“Dave… I’m done showering. My knee still hurts.” The door swung open, and Mindy came in. I jumped before closing my laptop quickly. Looking at where Mindy was, I could tell from the angle she looked at me that she could have seen what was on my screen. Thankfully, she could have only seen it for a brief moment, but it didn’t make me feel any better. The eye is a powerful thing – especially Mindy’s. Even if she was practically deprogrammed by Dr Paul, I wasn’t sure if his procedure had reached the way she used her eyesight back then.
“You forgot to knock, Mandy.” I said, making sure I was calm this time. I’d done enough bad brother routine for the day. I hate seeing her cry – It reminded me of everything that happened, everything I did wrong, everything that went wrong for her... That was her superpower now, and my Kryptonite.
“Oh, I’m sorry…” She apologised. She didn’t cry, but she was giving me the look of a kid in trouble, as if she’d just smashed a window or something. To put it into perspective though, my dad and I made knocking on the door to someone’s room a huge deal – we figured it as a safeguard for Mindy whenever we decide to experience the luxury that we could no longer have lying around with her in the family.
“It’s fine, Mandy, it really is!” I tried to lighten the mood, “Go sit on my bed and I’ll fix you up.” She smiled awkwardly, still recovering from making her mistake, and went to my bed, “Do you want a Barbie bandage or Hello Kitty?” I’d bought those for her just in case.
“Hello Kitty!” Mindy exclaimed excitedly, all seriousness forgotten.
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Hey, Dark Raven~
) to be a superhero. There could've been plenty of opportunities to explain this better.
Alright, so when I started reading the part about how Dave was able to just look up the active superheros and now I'm rather confused. Is it really just that easy to just look up on Google "What superheros are still on duty?" That doesn't seem like something that would be flaunted out there everywhere. So maybe think about that a little.
There goes with tons of back-story which confuses the hell out of me. How did Dave do? How did his intervention do anything? How did he intervene in the first place. True, it's rather hard to go through and have to build upon the world of the fan-fiction when the intended audience would know everything, but it feels too vague. His thoughts may turn to how he did it and shed some light on what went on. What happened with Big Daddy and so on. I do like this constant attention to the past and how its affecting Dave, but its - too, too - vague.
Now, with Dave's sudden decision to go back, it feels really quick. He's pondering it so deeply to the point when he sees how barren his room is and then it goes into his decision. Well, doesn't he think about Mandy? What about his Dad? Would he think its such a good idea? I don't mind the decision specifically, since it'll be nice to see what this Kick-Ass is that's always being mentioned, just the demeanor of it.
Interesting how Dave make such a big deal out of sending a facebook message... and obviously, I don't know anything about the 'Superhero' world that's been made in the Kick-Ass movie, so this all seems so weird, since it was never shown before. Everyone apparently knows who all the heroes are, but since I've went through the entire novel up until this point thinking its all secretive (because we were never shown how it really was
Back to my original point, I don't understand why Dave is making this big deal out of the message. Um, it's a message. The part about everything starting because of him didn't really make sense there and that all eyes are on him...? I suggest taking a look at that part.
One thing that I really like is that you've really shown us how the old Mindy was really, really well. The last sentence that he said about the bandage actually made me cringe, since I've really been able to identify with Dave and just want to see Mindy as the old way. It's really great, just perhaps add some more emotion in the beginning, like some nostalgia? But it's looking good.
Keep on Writing,
~Wolfare~
Ooh hello again

Another great chapter without any technical mistakes at all except tense jumping. The chapters just get better and better the further I go along.
I understand that Mandy is a shy little girl now, but there has to be a questioning look or she might say something about the fact that Dave suddenly slams his laptop down. I mean, I can easily remember that the worse thing than being told I couldn't do something was knowing that there was something going on that I wasn't in on. Children are curious little creatures, and they don't like being left out. I was a super shy kid as well, but that didn't stop my curiousness. It may have a lesser effect on Mandy, but I'd expect it would still be there.
So Dave's just going to trust this scientific guy because of appearance? Isn't that the exact same mistake he made with Red Mist? If I were him and I was feeling all guilty about it, I would be a bit more careful. This is another detail, but it was easy to guess that he would choose this scientific guy because he was the only superhero you gave a pretty detailed description on before he started choosing. My suggestion then is to mention him like all the others, and then when he's choosing, he could look at him more closely and get the full description then. Makes it less obvious
And he's back as a superhero, yay! Also, the ending of this chapter just goes to show how easy it is for little kids to get distracted. My last thing I'm going to say about this is:
HELLO KITTY ALL THE WAY <333
Deanie x
Back! I'm back in the new groooooove! xD I think that is how the song goes.... Oh well.
I soon won't be needing this section anymore! :O Ha-
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Again, just a few comments. Your grammar is better and better each time!
I wouldn't use again at the end of this sentence only because I think it is redundant. You know what I mean?
Don't know if I would add this? Maybe say it in a different format or words? Maybe, I could be wrong.
I like this paragraph a lot! Lots of detail and references back to the past and his regret. Love it!
Over all
Alright, here are a few thoughts I had as well. Is he going to get back into kick ass? If so, what will happen to Mindy if she finds out? You know what I mean, these kind of things. Now you did well here, I like the mood. It is basically all one mood throughout the part of the chapter. Though I can see his intentions to get back into it, will you let him? -Don't answer that, I don't wanna know!-
But you see what I mean? Can't wait to read the rest of the chapter!
Keep on writing and thank you for your time!
~Knight Onyx