Hey Niteowl,
I kind of liked the beginning half of this poem more than the last half, and I suppose I'll explain.
The title displaced immediately allows me to chew on several different possibilities for the narrative-story meaning of this piece, because displaced can be a synonym for "replace" in the sense that someone can be displaced from a position or home, also from a relationship, which seems to be what it was suggesting in the first part of the poem with the you/I and the hugged curves/new hand to hold, etc. but, honestly -- even though I know you meant and intended it to be read as a relationship dynamic -- it could also be taken as any sort of dynamic, so I enjoyed the wondering and the different layers of meanings which I thought kept the poem engaging/was a lot of fun.
The last half with the finding in the trash a golden treasure sort of took out the wonder element for me, and it made it into one of those: aha, a surprise twist in the end! and so I think I'm supposed to assume that the entire poem was about a pen the entire time P: Which is great, a lot of people love the twist-y ending, and definitely that hugging the curve thing was a great trick/word play -- I suppose it let me down only because I've read so many of these types of poems before, and I had different expectations regarding the title. But that's just me!
Third stanza in particular is my favorite 
Very clever.
~ as always, Audy
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