Young Writers Society

first i would like to say is wow!!!
i loved your poem for the fact that it came from your heart.
but like EZRA said the poem concept/event/topic of the poem remains pretty vague.
i felt like you left me hanging. i felt that more heart and sould counld have been put into your poem. it was beautiful,
did this teacher mean alot to you?
to get a real visual picture of this poem
maybe you should add memories, what type of person was he?
what stood out??
you get me?

please continue toi write i would love to see more work from you(:

Well niteowl, this poem was good. It was a bit choppy though. I didn't see a rhyme scheme, I don't know if there was supposed to be one. It was a good free verse; It flow right though. It was blooming with potential though and with some imagery it will be a fantastic poem. I did enjoy reading it and I hope to see more soon.

Such a nice poem you've got in there...its like a flowy hymn or something...the way that you present it but when one reads it...its sounds different so I suggest modification...well everything is alright words sentences and and all but the concept/event/topic of the poem remains uunclear...like everything is vague in this piece if you are presenting this as an individual piece....
I think you could go through this poem once more...I understand that it has much emotional connection but I think you should pour your heart and let your hand write without controlling it and sometimes the result is marvellous otherwise you could always modify or polish it to your liking...and remember it would simply not be a waste of time to do so...it would be a sort of practise and it always helps to lighten the heart...and calm the mind..

Overall not a bad poem at all:-D
Just requires some finishing touches...
Nice work by the way...