Young Writers Society

Humans developed languages in order to express their thoughts and feelings. But, it had started to seem to me that these all words that we have created specifically for the task of human expression are worthless, because being able to make others “completely understand” your “deepest” and “most true feelings” with the “same intensity” that you feel them, was becoming quite an impossible task in this world. Quite ironic if you think about it.
But you have proven me wrong. You, with this poem, were able to deliver the truest of your feelings to me. That style of writing, that thoughtful striking out of phrases, simple words yet an impactful delivery, everything about your poem was just perfect. You have given me hope that it is still possible to express our deepest and most sincere thoughts through words, something which I myself aim for.
Lastly, I would like to tell you that you have gain an admirer of your poems, and who hopes that you keep on writing and keep on sharng some of your feelings with us.

oh my godddd. I wasn't expecting much from this honestly, but damn it hit home. Crossing out "you've given me" to "I've given myself" is so real oh my god. I feel like we as writers over-romanticize things and relationships, and in the end, it feels like our fault for being so hurt, or at least I feel that way. Wanting the person that you feel so much pain about to feel your pain and knowing that they definitely won't, makes it all so much worse. I just loved this whole poem, so beautifully written and personal. I mean every word, not just writing a review to write a review lol. I adored this!

Hello!
This piece of writing is an emotional and introspective expression of the speaker's longing for their lost love. The use of repetition throughout the poem reinforces the speaker's desire to be heard, seen, and understood by the person they are addressing. The imagery of crying at the desktop and burying their face in their hands creates a sense of isolation and despair, while the reference to the empty summer breeze evokes a bittersweet nostalgia for a happier time.

The speaker's conflicting emotions of anger, love, and self-doubt are portrayed through their wish to make their ex-partner feel their pain and the realization that this desire may be selfish and destructive. The use of rhetorical questions such as "why are you now my enemy?" and "why are we both in such pain?" suggests a struggle to make sense of the situation and come to terms with the loss.

The ending of the poem is ambiguous, with the speaker acknowledging that their love may have been one-sided and that there may have been nothing there at all. However, the final line's parenthetical statements hint at a wistful longing for what could have been and a reluctance to let go completely.

Overall, this is a poignant and thought-provoking piece of writing that effectively conveys the complex emotions of heartbreak and the struggle to move on.