This is really wierd and immature. (BTW if you dont notice, its an acrostic poem. DUN DUN DUNNNNN) I HOPE YOU LIKE IT!!!
Someone help the poor
Unicorn who
Made a poop but
Made it too big for his loo and needs
Extra care
Regarding his poop 
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Hey, @whatevr! You'll probably never see this, but I'm going to give you a review really quickly! c: <3
Okay... this is definitely interesting to say the least XD
You have a unique story here, most definitely, but it doesn't really fit with the theme of the acrostic, like Elinor said. Summer isn't about unicorns and their droppings, but instead about swimming and parties and... that sort of stuff!
I hope you have a nice [*insert time of day here*]!!! <3
-Kendall
If we're going to write about unicorn poop, we may as well make it extremely interesting. I know this poem relies entirely on the form, but perhaps you'll have to break form to give the poem what it needs. Give us some description of the poop! Make some metaphors about it. Some comparisons. You may even be able to do this in form if you try.
Err, I don't know where to begin with this.
First, this doesn't really make much sense. I know it's not really supposed to, that this should just be a random mess of things, but I had to read it though twice to really understand what was going on.
Second, I think you need a little help in regards to the acrostic poem. You should be describing whatever the acrostic word is. In this case, that would be summer, and yet this is about a pooping unicorn. Second, each line should be one complete thought. For instance, if I had a poem about the word ice, it would be like this:
I ce cream and and other delectable treats.
C old, it gives you brain freezes.
E vaporates to water.
Not like this:
I ce cream and other treats
C ome from ice,
E specially the drinks.
In 2nd and 3rd grade, we wrote hundreds of acrostic poems throughout the school year. Believe me, I know how this stuff works.
Another thing that bothers me is that the lines seem a bit too forced. You don't "make" poop. It's already inside your body and you release it. Secondly, what is a loo?
Take these things into consideration when you revise, and PM me if you have questions.
-Elinor xo
P.S. About your smiley face at the end...delete it. I don't care how silly or nonsensical this poem is, but it's still poetry and you need to take yourself professionally. Smiley faces in your writing, while cute, are distracting and makes you look like you don't care a heck of a lot.