As It Becomes Madness

Hi, Spacey ^-^ Happy review day! (Hurray for the Blue Team!) I’m here to give you a review and personal opinions and all that pretty stuff . . .
I have to start off by saying that you really released this piece. It doesn't feel like you held any emotion back, like a lot of writers here do. It's open, it's deep, it's UNLOCKED. I can't find the right word that I'm searching for.
The only negative parts are that it's so raw in emotion, that it's confusing a tinny tiny bit. Some thoughts are disconnected while others are merged together, sort of blended in a way that's hard to understand.
And I'd advise you to break the piece up in stanzas, rather than having it squished together in a little paragraph as it is. It would flow better and look much nicer ^-^
Anyhoo! Keep writing~

Catnip~

I personally like the openness of this poem. There's no real explanation of what is causing the writer pain until around the end, and it makes me want to continue reading to figure out why this person is so upset. It can get sort of confusing here and there because the thought all kind of blend together. I would go with flamgo and maybe cap some of the letters or put some puncation in. Other than that I would say this was a good piece and you should continue writing poetry. Good luck!(:

I like the rhythm of this piece, the way it kind of revs up and keeps a momentum going. I also am assuming your lack of punctuation is deliberate because of the subject of the poem, but I would suggest some sort of distinction between thoughts, somehow. Maybe you could start it with using punctuation and capital letters, etc, and then slowly break from that and continue to do that until it's like it is now, and you could even make the last few thoughts run together completely, like "itweepsasitbecomesmaddness" because if you're going to play with form like this, you might as well go all out. Also, I like your imagery, but I would try to get to more specific details in there, if possible, because the specifics really make a piece real and vivid for the reader. But great job, especially for only being 13. It's awesome to just write, especially from a young age, and play with stuff. Really cool.