Hello, there! Arden here to drop you a quick review.
I really took a fondness to this piece. The flow is flawless and I found it to be a very pleasant read. It did strike home a bit, as I've experienced this kind of feeling (just being human) and it's honestly saddening. Us as people always want some sort of happiness, and wanting to be with a partner to share that happiness with is truly a fantastic idea. (That's basically what love is.) What really gives that drop of sorrow in a sea of hope, though, is what you're covering in this poem. Fear of rejection, shyness, etc. All the things that could go wrong in the relationship you want to pursue, you're sure they've come crashing down on you. All because your love interest has no idea who you are. And that's one of the most sad and unfair concepts anyone could experince. Pure torture while your love interest is prancing around, oblivious to your feelings.
Overall, you have a fantastic way with words. This was a great read. You strung sentences together without worrying about rhymes. Your choices of words were really good and really well-thought out.
Keep writing, and thanks for sharing! I hope to see more from you soon.
Arden
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