Hey dystopianmonkey01, here for a Review Day review,
Positives:
One day I took my scalpel and painted art with it, I would run them through the streets and paint the cobblestones red,
I liked this. It was a bit cliche and a bit obvious that painting with a scalpel will be red, but the fact that you chose a scalpel as the preferred item was a good choice. Now we can perform surgery on your poor broken heart.
I was fooled into circles of despair
Quite liked this imagery. I've always though of things such as depression as a downward spiral that doesn't seem to end, and that's what you've talked about here.
Negatives:To be honest, I'm not sure why this is even in the poetry section? I get that it can fit into a prose-poetry style, but then, it doesn't really feel like it. Every once in awhile I'll catch a glimpse, but most of the time I feel like I'm reading an epic where the main antagonist is telling about all his glorious escapades. Kind of throwing me off here.
Overall:It's nothing I haven't seen before, but I give you props for trying to work on painting images for me, rather than just telling me what things are. That's what makes poetry good.
I give it:
Points: 6987
Reviews: 117
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