OHHHHH!
Thank you Young Writers Society,
For always being there
for me.
A place to post
and talk to friends
we never met.
Isn't neat
That Nate could
make
such an amazing
place!
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Chorus
Y.W.S !
Y.W.S!
It's the best!
Y.W.S!
Don't put us
to the test.
Cause we will
crush the the rest.
Y.W.S
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OHHHHH!
Yeah!
People are nice
and kinda
wacky.
The site is blue
and never tacky.
Its the best,
Forget the rest !
No competition
Its perfection!
We live to write
and write to live .
Don't pretend
you don't
understand.
Not a hobby
a way of
life .
Write , Write, WRITE!
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Chorus 2x
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Yeah its the best !
Best ,best,best!
WRITE!
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hi daisamari!!! this is an awaome song and of course i liked it. i not just saying that because ur my friend. i actually think its a good song.
Helloo Dasiamari!!
This song totally put a smile on my face XD I like it! I do suggest you expand on the sentences though (sorry if that isn't good english OO), because it looks a little bit too short. But that's pretty much all I have to say XD Nice write and I enjoyed reading this. I hope I helped a little and if I didn't then please forgive me for wasting your time XD
Keep writing!
-qaralynn-
hehe, this is very interesting. i like how you incorporated 'The site is blue, and never tacky." at first i thought you said the sky is blue, but reading it over, I realized what it said, and smiled. i think maybe you could add something to the chorus. it was getting me really excited and happy to read it, then the chorus came and i went... wait.... what? oh.. moving on. so, yeah. maybe you could say YWS! YWS! it's the best, better than the rest! YWS! YWS! it's the best, so put it to the test! or something, you know? i love how you incorporated the importance of the people here, and thier friendly, but crazy, personalities. i think that you should add something about the writings, though. imagine you are giving this to someone who never saw yws. they would think it was just sme wierd type of facebook. by adding stuff about how we live to WRITE, they would understand, see? it is just a suggestion, actually a bunch of suggestions, but you know, i think they could really help your stuff. this is VERY good so far, but of course, we can always make everything just a little better, you know?
great job, keep it up!!!!!