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So! Hi, Dasia!
I think that's meant to say "parody" in the title? But I don't know know the song (or whatever it may be) is, so I'm just going to... review it as if it were itself. xD Disregard anything that doesn't make a lick of sense!
The song is a nice start, but I must admit that it confused me a bit. I'm afraid I can't really relate to this because I don't know what I'm relating to. xD The story isn't really hinted or explained at all, so I can't say much in that regard. I'm sorry! (I admit to my being-slow on these things.)
I do like what you did with the elastic metaphor and the terminology you used like "stretch" to enforce it. I think you should totes continue using that. Maybe. It's just cool! I could understand that bit. 8D
I don't understand what the speaker is saying or feeling, but I already explained that. However, I do feel that bit's been repeated many times throughout the song, so I don't have much else to say. Just a little more story for the listener to understand and comprehend. Much of it is repetitive.
It's not one of my favorite pieces, but hopefully, I provided some insight on this one. Hope to run into more of your work! <333
Keep writing!
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Wow since Nate stopped the points program.I never get replies
Oh, it's not that he stopped the points program! A lot of features just didn't get transferred over for the renovation. Plus, I know I was certainly busy with school, so I wasn't paying attention to the Browse section. You should totes PM me, though, if/when you post! I'll review it much sooner.
Also, WRFF is at your disposal!