Run

This song is amazing ^^ But I agree with WAW that you could state genre and speed at the top, so we could see if the lyric would flow with the speed ^u^

But seriously, this is good ^^ I like the message, cause everyone can relate to it ^^ I like how you describe the the breaking down with breaking a wild horse ^^ It makes it easier to relate too, while we still know what to relate too, you know what I mean? ^u^

Please, I want to hear thislaloud ^^ It would be totally awesome ^^

Keep Writing! ^u^

I like this song, and I too, would like to see it a little longer. But the song would still be okay if you didn't.
So, I didn't see any notable problems in this. I really really like your chorus and your message. But I feel you could help our readers connect with it more if you stated these two things at the top:
Type-country, rock, opera, etc.
Tempo-fast or slow.
I think it would give the reader a better idea of how the song would sound. It's just a suggestion though.
My rating: 4.8*s
My favourite part:

" So I build it higher
so I build it longer
but the others try to get in.
And my wall
it falls
so I run."

Keep writing and sharing!

w&w

I like it, not a bunch to it. It would be a very short song. I would like to see if you actually made it longer, what it would look like. The wall thing is a little cliche' but you add some originality to it, so its not that bad.

Chorus
I've never been much of a runner
Always stood up to the fight
I've never been much of a quiter
I always tried 'till I got it right.
But the blows
and the pain
my knees go weak
my head goes light and I fall.
and I quit
then I run.

I truely thought you'd never be
the one to break me.
I out smarted you with wit
but you out fought me with
your fist.
I hope your proud
you knocked me down
And now I run.