Not A Fairytale Ending

i like this its a good song but it sounds like a taylor swift song but its way better then most of her songs you should sing this and put it on youtube cuz you are one awesome llama and ima read more of ur stuff later llama

Hi, Dasia!

Awww. I find this is one of your better pieces of the ones I read today, anyway. I liked it! I liked some of the references to the story behind it. It's sweet and sad at the same time. It's well done!

Fairytales are used a lot in songs, but gah. I have such a soft spot for them. So I'm not going into that since I'm not one to talk.

I'm starting to understand you like repeating lines a lot rather than giving more insight on what's being said. And that's totes legit since a lot of songs are like that and those can still be sweet and fun to listen to. Brownie points for originality is a lot harder to receive since a lot of those simple songs have already been done by someone else. Just keep that in mind!

I like how we catch a glimpse at how their relationship is right now. It certainly gives a better perspective at what's being described here, which the audience will appreciate. The Prince Charming bit seems a bit wrong since it appears that the relationship with Charming is the actual problem. Perhaps a little more insight as to how it would be repaired or maybe a taste of sweet memories. I dunno. Just suggestions for a little flourish~

It's a good song, though. I liked it. Well done!

Keep writing!

Jabber, the One and Only!

hiii! i really liked this song!!!! itvwas really good.