What Have We Done? - Revamped Version!

Hi. It’s tinybookfarie... Sorry, I did see your post on my wall, but unfortunately, I was very busy so I couldn’t get to review it. Although, don’t worry. I kept a mental note about it.

So anyway, here I am!!!!!

This was really great. I do remember reading something just like this, and I think it’s even better. I mean, not saying that the other one was bad (NO WAY) just meaning that I really like the fact that you made a better version of the same poem, and I think that I’m suppose to like this one better. Which I do.

The rhyming part was impeccable... And the French part was like, FAN-CY!” Bruh, I don’t know French that well, but I am fluent with it and I do know enough to know what is French. This was really good, and when you said that you had made a revised version of your poem, I think you really stood your ground with it. Good job.

There is one thing that i would like to suggest to you.

keep

on

writing

Cuz I would deffinetely enjoy to review more of your work!
your friend - tinybookfarie

I'm sat here in my science lesson, not paying attention to something I probably should be, totally enthralled by your poem!
Honestly, i cannot think of anything to critique or suggest.
The rhyme scheme was great, it gave it a really nice kind of 'beat' that made the poem flow really well. It sounds really good aloud, as well!
There was some amazing, clear imagery, and I especially liked the French, probably because I understood it and it made me feel clever, aha
Keep writing dude, it's honesty fantastic and probably one of my new favourite poems

I liked reading this one a lot. It is very different and it seems that your trying to ask a question but I feel like the meaning of the poem might have needed to be more clearer because It is just a little confusing about the main meaning that is displayed throughout the whole poem and I was hoping I would kinda figure it out towards the end. It is really good though and it uses a lot of complex words so I also think you might wanna think of who or what age group might be reading it because some words were very complex and I hadn't heard of them all before. It definently different message or vibe I just wish I could of understood it better. Thank you for sharing it.