Without Sanity

Wow I i am so speechless this is amazing!!! I defiantly know what you mean in this poem it speaks to me in so many ways!!
Please keep writing
I'll try to be the first to review them
This poem is obviously gonna be my fave
I've feel like this for a very long time
and its nice to know that someone feels the same way!!
If you need anything im here but all in all keep
on writing!!!

I love the imagery this poem provide, and I do love this part Without this respectable way of life,

"We will be ostracized,

We will be sacrificed

To be the example of all that is evil in life."
The concept of the poem is excellent, however some parts are a little rough around the edges, and some things can be tweeked, however I do love the words you use, and some parts flow extremely well that it's mind blowing. An excellent poem, with a little awkwardness. Well done.

Heyyy I’m here to review! Okay so I’m going to start with what I like about this poem:

I really for some reason liked the repeated lines “I still believe in dreams, I still believe in love.” Probably because, for me, this made the poem so much more powerful. I really like how I can actually read this in a way that it feels like it’s actually being spoken to me. If that makes sense? Like some poems can be very dense and hard to understand, but reading your is a lot easier. My favorite stanza of the poem is:
“Without this hope,”
“Without this feeling,”
“Without this respectable way of life,”
“We will be ostracized,”
“We will be sacrificed”
“To be the example of all that is evil in life.”
It flowed exceptionally well and I don’t know how you even think of these word choices. Like it blows my mind that people can actually create these amazing poems like yours.

Now on to what I personally think you should possibly change:
Okay, so the big thing for me is that the rhyming scheme was awkward and inconsistent. Like it didn’t always rhyme every other line or it didn’t always not rhyme. It’s just that the rhyming scheme didn’t stay the same, and that jacked with the flow a little bit. Another thing I want to say, is that I think you should’ve justified this awesome work with a way better, less abrupt ending. I feel like if this poem ended a little better then this piece would truly be astonishing.

Overall, your poem was pretty amazing with a bit of an awkward rhyming scheme. Again, you don’t have to change anything if you don’t want to, just wanted to suggest.

~CAKEEEEEE