My heart is pounding. I take small, cautious steps and make my way up to the stage. Keri is there waiting for me, her hand outstretched. I take it tentatively and climb the steps to join her.
Just calm down, I tell myself. You knew this would happen. You saw it coming ever since the reading of the card.
It’s the truth. This year is the Quarter Quell, twenty-five years since the Dark Days. This year’s Hunger Games will be worse than ever. The Capitol wants a show and the gamemakers will deliver, no doubt about it.
What’s special about the Quarter Quell is that there’s a twist in the Games. This year the districts were forced to vote for the boy and girl who would enter the Games as tributes. We had a box positioned in the middle of town here in Five. One day during school we were all required to come down and vote for one boy tribute and one girl tribute.
I don’t know whether to feel honored or betrayed that I was chosen. Of course in the Capitol, they will hold me and the twenty-three other kids joining me in high ranks. We are special; the elite. It’s as if each district is a Career district this year. Each tribute selected will be the toughest, strongest, most intelligent in the district.
Which is why I feel slightly honored. I never knew my district thought of me in this way. They obviously think I can win. Why would they pick me if they didn’t? But looking out over the crowd, the feeling of betrayal creeps back. The people of District Five; my friends, my family, my classmates, my worker friends, my teachers just wrote me off. I may be strong, but there’s no way I can survive these Games. I know this now.
There’s no way.
“Alexander Herring.”
A tall, well built boy joins me on stage. We shake hands and I notice his eyes are full of determination and fury, not fear like mine. Great, even my district partner has a one up on me. I’m definitely getting killed in the bloodbath now.
We’re led into the Justice Building and marched down the hall. The room I’m forced into looks old and decrepit. The walls are covered with peeling wallpaper. I walk across the slick tiled floor and collapse into a large, comfortable armchair next to the fireplace.
This is a safe place to cry. No cameras shoved in my face, no one there to criticize me or tell me I should be proud, not upset that I was chosen. The tears fall freely as I wait for my parents to come say goodbye.
But they don’t. By the time I stop crying, my hour is almost up. I didn’t expect any visitors besides my family. Sure I have friends, but none close enough to come say goodbye to me before I am sent to my death.
Suddenly, the door opens and a small, timid boy walks in. I recognize him immediately as the helper at the power plant I work at. He’s always hanging around me, but he’s never talked to me. But here he is, my only visitor.
His clothes are torn and dirty. They look like the same thing he wears everyday. It’s sad. He’s only ten years old and an orphan. The people of the town take care of him somewhat, but not enough to keep him strong. His brown hair is in a crazy mess on top of his head and his blue eyes have a certain kind of sadness to them. It must have taken a lot of courage for him to come see me.
“Hello,” I say, wiping my eyes. I don’t want him knowing that I was crying. “Did you come to say goodbye?” He doesn’t respond. In fact, he won’t raise his eyes from the floor, which makes it hard for me to keep up a conversation.
“Did my parents send you?”
He shakes his head and reaches into his pocket. When his hand emerges, I see it holds a locket. He offers it to me and I take it, rolling it over in my palm. I try to open it, but it seems stuck. I look up to ask if it opens, but the boy is gone.
Confused, I sit back in the chair. After more unsuccessful attempts to open the locket, I tie it around my neck. This will be my token. Whatever is inside, if anything is inside, it was important. Why else would that little boy come all the way here, face the peacekeepers and give it to me?
My hour is up and I’m being marched out of the room and out of the Justice Building. The district is lining the path to the train as they do every year. Usually they are alive, full of energy and throwing wishes to the tributes. The Hunger Games aren’t all that popular here in District Five, but we play along with it because we don’t want to be punished by the Capitol.
We live in fear.
This year they are silent. They understand that they're sending one of us off to our deaths. They know that whichever one of us dies, or if both of us dies, they will be responsible. It doesn't sit well with them. I doesn't sit well with me either.
I search the crowd for my parents, but they’re not here. I guess they don’t care about their only child. What if I win? Will I come back and find them begging me to share my riches with them? I’m sure that’s exactly what I’ll find.
Maybe I shouldn’t win then. Maybe I should just die; kill myself in the arena or simply put myself in harms way. No one seems to care about me in this district. First they voted me into the Games, then they didn’t visit me to say goodbyes, except for the boy, and now my parents are no where to be found.
But maybe that’s the reason I should live. And win. So I can rub it in their faces. So they can see how strong of a person I am and how I don’t need them in my life. Yes, that’s what I will do. I will be the victor of the first Quarter Quell. And when I get back, I won’t share any of my winnings.
Just to spite everyone who doesn’t care about me.
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Hello Noelle,
I have never read the hunger games, but so far this is great. I have never been a true fan of fan fiction due to people just pretty much re-writing the original. I can already tell that your story is not going to be like that
Good description and details, especially on the environment.
Strong emotions, always makes a story good so keep them high. i think the only thing i would change, but just my opinion is.
Maybe I shouldn’t win then. Maybe I should just die; kill myself in the arena or simply put myself in harms way. Maybe try to connect ll of that into one. but still really well written and was worth the read.
Keep up the good work!
Alex
so I'm not usually a fan of fan fiction, but is has been bugging me that even in the later books, the other districts besides 11, 12, and 13 are largely left out of the story. because of that, it is pretty cool to see people doing things with the other districts, and this definitely has potential.
The downside to fanfiction however, is that everyone already knows the setting, so to live up to the standards of the original, you have to do something interesting with the narrative or the characters. you have something good here, and I like how you've set up the plot so far, but it seems to be lacking in feeling. don't get me wrong, there are plenty of interesting emotions here, loneliness, fear, anger, but it all seems relatively distant and numb. make the emotions stand out, and feel vivid and powerful. write as if you are writing poetry, and put all of the anguish, and conflicted emotions of the character into every word. a lot of this can be done through body language. "She was sad, and began to cry" is less powerful than, "A single bitter tear ran down her face, spreading its warmth to her clammy skin. she didn't have the energy to even wipe it away under the feeling of overwhelming sadness that was slowly crushing her."
your environment can be incredibly useful for setting the mood or eliciting emotion, so don't be afraid to get descriptive just because it's fanfiction. keep in mind that while Collins was very descriptive of her world, we know practically nothing about the other districts or arenas from fifty years in the past, so be as creative with that as the source material allows.
thanks for a good read, keep up the good work! your friend,
---Psudiname
Okay, I loved this! As you know I am a huge Hunger Games fan and I am always looking for fanfictions.
Time for my review! I actually don't think there were any errors, so...
I can't wait to read the next chapter and see where this goes!
Heya! I've read the hunger games and it kept me on edge all the time because so many terrible things would just happen unpredicted. I feel like you have the potential to do that too. Because I was feeling a knot in my stomach while reading. this story just has that effect on people but the amazing thing is that you're able to write it so well. It was strange how the girl's parents didn't show up or anyone at all except for the little boy. Maybe they sent him because he looks so completely helpless and all and no one would suspect him. By the way, I need to know what the locket looks like? I'm completely blank when I think about it. A tiny mistake:
Just keep wall posting me.
I doesn't sit well with me either. (It)
The only one I could find. Sorry about that. It's good though that you started right off of the point where the tributes have been chosen and all. Am wondering what you're going to write next.
Hi Noelle!

I really like the emotion you put in through the character, (I'm not really sure if she has a name yet, I probably missed it). The anger. The frustration. The betrayal. It all seems very real in this chapter.
I am really interested in the locket. Whenever there's secrets in books, I am always trying to figure them out. Can't wait to see what you have in store!
I don't really have any criticism. Great job!
I can't wait for chapter two.
-Jadefox
p.s. okay I thought of something that's missing PEETA! Nah, I am just kidding.