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You have a good start on this, and it is quite interesting. Yet theres too much diologue and not so much detailed descriptions in there. So try to make it longer, add thoughts and actions that the characters do. Although there is some polishing and editing to do,it did keep me interested. That should be a good thing.

""Just shut up," Ryder mumbled, heading toward the forest."
I would like to see something more, something like how there could be more elves hiding in there, and she's worrying about that.

Also the begining was interesting, but didnt get me hooked right away. So all I have to say is you need very little polishing up and work on the very begining and you should be good.

This is a good start, but it definitely needs polishing up and additional details. It also feels as though we were thrown straight into the mix of what's going on; perhaps beginning a little esrlier, before the test actually begins? We would also get more time to know the characters this way.
As it stands, this is definitely interesting, so keep it up.
Keep Writing,
StoryWeaver

It is really interesting but i think you should make it longer, especially considering how there is a lot of dialogue. Also i think you should describe the characters more. The main character especially since we are seeing things from her view.

It is really interesting but i think you should make it longer, especially considering how there is a lot of dialogue. Also i think you should describe the characters more. The main character especially since we are seeing things from her view.

I like it but because a lot of it is dialogue, i think you should make it a little bit longer