what a fool am I for busying myself
when I could be indulging in idle day-dreaming,
letting the sun’s whiskers tickle my naked arms,
allowing its paws to carry me onto Alice’s land.
what a fool am I for the fervor I feel
as your heart marauds about me like some feral fox
ready to leap onto mine; but naïve I am not,
for before you came my way, my beloved,
I saw into your wile.
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Hey Mikko
Very interesting poem you have here. The ending made me smile, for isn't that kind of love great? This is an uplifting and calming poem, and you had some great imagery in there. At times, though, it was a little difficult to follow, and I think the punctuation contributed to that. You probably intended to leave out the normal punctuation for style, but that made following the poem's rhythm a bit hard for me.
So there were flow issues and some punctuation issues, but overall, very nice poem.
I really like this poem. It has a nice flow and it sounds nice. I am confused as to the meaning of it. In the beginning it sounds like someone regretting not having more fun in life, but then it moves on to talking about love. I might just not be getting it. It sounds really good and is written really well!
I really like this poem. It has a nice flow and it sounds nice. I am confused as to the meaning of it. In the beginning it sounds like someone regretting not having more fun in life, but then it moves on to talking about love. I might just not be getting it. It sounds really good and is written really well!