Young Writers Society

This made me cry. I love it so much!! <3

Hello, let's get into my review.

This is really sweet because it is written for someone you know and love. You've taken your time to express your affection and adoration, and you have freely used imagery to paint mental pictures.

I like the recurring theme of the ocean that you've used. And since that's your main theme here, I'd suggest possibly coming up with a new title that has something to do with water, the ocean, etc. The end of the poem does mention "sunset," but you never actually seem to compare the object of your poem with a sunset, which makes the title feel a little off to me.

I don't think I saw any spelling errors, and grammar seems to be pretty good, too.

Well, that's all for now. Thanks for sharing!

Knock knock.
Who's there?
Ellie.
Ellie who?
Ellie bawling her eyes out reading this poem because it's so good T-T

Okay, this was so good (like every poem you post) but this one hit me really hard because hearing a mother love her child makes me cry every single time.

I made silent vows to the stars when you were born—
to protect you, to guide you, to love you with all the ferocity of the ocean’s depths.

I’ll be your lighthouse and beam my spotlight to boost your courage,
until the day that you leave me and know how to wield your own.
You are my heart, my soul, my endless ocean of love, and in every wave you ride,
I am with you, cheering you on, loving you more with each passing sunset.

Text Version:

Dear Harley, my beautiful blessing,

From the moment your honey eyes meet mine, I felt each tide shift within me.
Your tiny fingers clung to my pinky with a grip so strong, so firm.
Watching you grow has been like watching the ocean itself evolve, your first steps were
like the first rays of sun that touch the water, signaling a new dawn.
Your laughter is the song of the sea, a melody that can chase away storm clouds and
waterspouts.

I made silent vows to the stars when you were born—
to protect you, to guide you, to love you with all the ferocity of the ocean’s depths.
Your growth awes me like the beauty of changing suns,
there was once a time when your hand was less than half the size of mine, when your nose crinkled at the smell of pepper.
The waves you inherited from me are ever shifting.

You constantly remind me of my endless love for you, sweetheart.
So, I must warn you, as you grow and explore, that the ocean is vast and full of raging currents.
I’ll be your lighthouse and beam my spotlight to boost your courage,
until the day that you leave me and know how to wield your own.
You are my heart, my soul, my endless ocean of love, and in every wave you ride,
I am with you, cheering you on, loving you more with each passing sunset.

<3

Mommy