Young Writers Society

Hello Hello I hope you dont mind me coming in with a review. I will also apologize if this isn't as in-depth as normal. If I am not mistaken and correct me if I am wrong but I read on your wall this might be based on your life, I do hope things get better if so. I feel you did a very good job portraying these feelings the start is nicely vivid and the end shows the longing well. The small details you use sound in some ways how my partner describes me when they try to cheer me up, and the same love I try to give back so the admiring comes out super well.

If there's anything I would give feedback on besides the points others have given has to do with capitalization. For example, the word but has capitalization and other times not. I am sorry if this is a stylistic or grammar thing I am not picking up on.

ex:

" But you know I love you,"

&
"but I wish I didn't,"

Regardless I wish you and your family the best of luck. Take care of yourself and keep writing!

First things first, THE TITLE!!! absolutely LOVE it. It leaves you guessing, especially because when people are talking about "those three words" we automatically assume its "I Love You" but instead of choosing that as your title, you kept it mysterious which leaves a lot of room for interpretation which I believe is the true heart of poetry. In the first stanza I absolutley love the line " I let you step all over me, until im dirty and rugged". The diction in this line is so strong! Especially with the word LET! It gives the speaker power but also weakness. This is amazing! I cannot wait to see what else you come up with!

Time for a Black Cat Review!!

MEOW! Hello, friend! My name is Ellie and today I will be reviewing using my very own Black Cat Review Method! It is very similar to the incredible YWS S'more Method but I have Halloween-ified it and made it spooky! My little black cat friend, Vladimir, wants to offer his opinion on your amazing literary piece:

Mystical Witch Hat - What I See, Observe, and Interpret

First impression- this is so incredibly beautiful, Leya I love the painting at the top! Is it yours or where did you get that, so so pretty!

It's extraordinary how much I love you,

but I wish I didn't,

But you know I love you,

so it doesn't matter.

Right?

I meant it.

Is this a game to you?

I'm scared I'll lose my mind to your justified,

actions of discipline and abandonment.

how your voice changes when you're speaking on the phone,

the simple things.

I adore the way you carry yourself,

how you shrug at the slightest inconvenience,

how your voice changes when you're speaking on the phone,

the simple things.

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But you only adore me because I said those three words.

I hope you have a spook-tastical day, filled with black cat mischief!