Young Writers Society

Hi, Ley! It's Serrurie again, here to leave a review! Let's dive in:

The Good Stuff
- This poem is right-aligned, which I always thought was unique
- Repeating the word 'more' in italics really drives the main theme for this farther; which I thought was the desire to keep creating.
- You are extremely talented at visual language. When you described her and her art using an orchestra, I could picture it vividly.
- You add a twist at the end that was unexpected. It shows not only her longing to create, but to be able to keep what she created for herself. It also hints at an adventure and a bigger story for the artist.

Room For Improvement
- I think this was a great poem. In terms of grammar, concept, and theme, you executed these wonderfully. I would simply suggest revisiting how you uploaded your photo for this, because I wasn't able to see it .

Overall Opinion
- As per usual, Ley, you created your own masterpiece! I hope you continue your writing journey and do what you do best.

Happy writing, and have a blessed day!

Serrurie

I fell in love with this straight away the title the artist caught my eye and the fact that you wrote this for your friend I believe is super great how they inspired you to write this piece. The last words ¨ Snapped her paintbrush, Threw the canvas,And never looked back.¨ Brings me back to a place that I was in myself once I am very glad to have found this piece because I really feel its beautiful. It also goes deep into how the artist is struggling yet others will never know or feel it like the artist thank you so much for writing this please keep going
-Jaygg

I THOUGHT THIS WAS MY WORK AND I WAS LIKE WHAAA AND I REALIZED IT HAD THE SAME TITLE

"Captivating and emotionally charged, this poem takes readers on a journey into the soul of an artist torn between the vibrant world she creates on canvas and the dissatisfaction that lingers within. The vivid imagery, metaphorical brilliance, and rhythmic flow paint a powerful picture of the internal struggle faced by the protagonist. The use of colors as a reflection of emotions and the metaphor of the studio as her brain add layers of depth to the narrative. The comparison of her arms moving like piano chords, with the paintbrush as her orchestra, beautifully illustrates the synergy between the artist and her creation. The internal conflict is palpable as she expresses dissatisfaction with the dichotomy of her secluded existence and the external admiration for her art.

The turning point, where she snaps her paintbrush and discards the canvas, signifies a significant decision to break away from the identity she had created for herself. It's a poignant moment of rebellion against the expectations placed upon her as an artist. The climax, where the artist breaks free from her self-imposed constraints, is a moment of rebellion that resonates with authenticity. 'More' echoes not only as a desire for artistic fulfillment but also as a plea for self-discovery. A beautifully crafted poem that lingers in the mind, inviting readers to reflect on the complexity of identity and artistic expression."