Young Writers Society

oh my god???
disclaimer this is not a full blown review, just something i happened to stumble upon spontaneously, but
i love this so much???

i think my absolute favorite thing about this is how cohesive your entire poem is, like a laser focused vignette of this failed relationship with someone, and i am obsessed with the way you lay out your observations on this person and your feelings regarding them using CHEMISTRY
like-

ionic equilibrium in international anarchy

did your discontent find contedness in our broken glass and chemical bonds

new jaded elitism

Forgive me if this seems a little messy, I'm far more rusty at this then I should be. I really enjoyed this poem and I'd like to give a review of it. The first thing that stood out to me is coincidently the first part of the poem, you start it off by using 'and', which is something I don't really see a lot of. I think it creates a very nice rolling sense to the entire piece, as though it is continuing off of something else to become it's own thing. It certainly helps to create an initial sense of mystery which I feel helps to build the dramatic elements introduced later. In general, I'd say that your word choice really stands out, and is one of things about this poem. My only real complaint would be it's length but I think that it more than makes up for that in the end and it isn't really much of an issue.

Overall, very well done.