hi this isn't a review whatsover, i was just imagining this being a suddenly gay story from the title >.>
hi this isn't a review whatsover, i was just imagining this being a suddenly gay story from the title >.>
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Wow, what a poem.
It's slightly gritty, heartfelt, and somber all at once. And in such a short poem too. Short poems that convey a big message are some of my favorite ones. The grammatical errors add a sense of rush. But I see them as thoughts. We people think so fast that we don't think twice about pronouncing things correctly, especially when we've had too much to drink.
The twist in behavior starting with the line, "i kissed your lips and tasted jack daniels, you told me you didnt drink so i let you drive me home," and then going straight to, "i trust you with everything in my soul." is something that is quite strange. I'd like to think this confusion leads to the narrator talking about studying psychology, maybe to understand more on why we do these things as humans. Very well done and put together. The addition of the red and blue squiggly lines is very similar to how I think people think in a rush.
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MEOW! Hello, friend! My name is Ellie and today I will be reviewing using my very own Black Cat Review Method! It is very similar to the incredible YWS S'more Method but I have Halloween-ified it and made it spooky! My little black cat friend, Vladimir, wants to offer his opinion on your amazing literary piece:
Mystical Witch Hat - What I See, Observe, and Interpret
lets get right into breaking dow this beautiful poem 
This was a very beautiful and raw poem! i absolutely love the style and layout that you used. this conveys the message that it is pure and right from the heart, probably typed up to express how someone was feeling when they felt inpsired to do so, in their phone.
i love the narrative of being at a party, and drinking too much fruity wine. i love the descriptions of the lipstick and fingerprints on the glass.
the stand-out line in the poem is this one:
but instead i kissed your lips and tasted jack daniels, you told me you didnt drink so i let you drive me home,
i trust you with everything in my soul.
Neat Swift reference, and I like the alcohol imagery, though I can't quite understand what you were trying to say. I appreciate that, since generally people write either too simplistic or too generic- so hats off to you for being creative
hello <3 tea here to write a short review on this lovely poem
firstly, I loved the mention of the folklore cardigan. taylor swift who >.>? But in all seriousness, i loved this poem. The underlines and the like mouse thing... i forgot what it's called, but anyway. very unique and fun! I loved the line "the christmas lights they begged me to" as if the lights are peer pressuring you or something along those lines.
secondly, this was a great poem! I can't nitpick it because this is amazing :3 also i love the title for no apparent reason except how it ended in so i dont really know why
hmmm i should read more of your poetry <333
woah this was a short review,
-tea
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