Fly Away

I know this one was inspired by the second to last verse in Roses of May.

I think this poem is beautiful and written so well it's just... fabulous. It captures the feelings of what it's like to long for a virtue we should always have. The only thing I would say to change, would be to add punctuation. It think this poem would be ten times better if you added periods and commas throughout because right now it comes off as a run on. Fix that up, and you'll be golden.

~Nightlyowl

Wow, I like it. You had a great variety of words. You also had vivid expression.
I love the feelings that the poem points out. I've felt this way so many times. Good luck on your writing!

BiancaLU

Sweet, I really like this poem!! It describes exactly how I feel... That yearning to be free but you feel like you're stuck where you are and you feel like you can't do anything about it. That's how I feel and this poem describes it all. I loved how you put,

"But I am an earthbound creature

With wounded wings

And a heavy heart of stone

Locked up tight inside a cage"

This was very creative and you had some awesome word choice. I really liked the poem and you're a great writer! Keep writing!!!!

Wow, this is an awesome piece of work.
I like they way you have written this, and made the reader think and relate to your ideas and the poem itself!
I particularly like...:

"With wounded wings
And a heavy heart of stone"

It enables me to really visualize it and see the point of humans being earth-bound.
I really really like this a lot and your syllables are just right, resulting in the poem flowing just perfectly.
Overall, amazing poem, and sorry for not criticizing it, as I just couldn't find anything!
-CFG

I enjoyed this poem. I also always feel like I want to just jump up and fly away and soar far away from my troubles. The only criticism I have, and this is a personally opinion, is maybe that you could have ended with the same line as you began with. Other than that, well done and I hope to see more from you in the near future.

Very nice. I think that you hit the hammer on the head there with the whole
wanting to fly thing. I look forward to more by you.

Hello, I am here to review this wonderful poem. I liked how you used the bird, and it's ability to fly to escape troubles. It was a really brilliant idea, and a lot of the time a poem has it's one shining moment, but then it goes on and on, or it just misses the mark. But in my opinion, I think this poem was absolutely perfect, with the exception of grammar. I think it would benefit the poem if you added in grammar, but other then that, I saw no problems with it. Good job and keep writing.

Hi!
This was really good! I love the theme and mood, it's a lovely poem. I think you could improve it a bit with some better vocabulary. I like the line "with wounded wings."
Maybe instead of writing fly away twice, you could replace one of them with glide away or sail away or something else meaning something similar. I also like how the heart of stone connects with the weight of sorrow.
Great poem, keep writing!

DragonLily, I think we've all felt this way at some point in our lives, whether we are young or older. I think that is what really makes an impact on people - being able to relate to a piece of writing. Your poem is completely relatable, and I love that. That is what I typically look for when I am looking for something to read - something relatable, something I can read and be able to say, "I really understand how that feels." I don't typically write or read poetry, but I had to stop by and read this because the title caught my eye. I'm a big bird lover; not because I like birds, but because of what they symbolize. I see nothing I can critique with this poem. Please keep writing relatable pieces like this!

-FireFox