Try to forget.
Try to run.
Focus on here.
Focus on now.
Leave the past behind,
Let it rest in peace.
Don’t allow these things
Which don’t exist
To tear you apart.
But who am I to say
What was right then
And what belongs now?
Faded images swirl
Like a misted fog
Half-forgotten memories
Of the ones I used to love.
Echoes of the life I once lived.
Come to me, make me whole once more.
But who are you to bring to life
That which has already passed?
Those days, long gone
You knew them once
But now, they are a mystery
Part of a life you no longer live.
Let them fade away.
Put them to rest, and quiet frantic thoughts.
Soothe your aching heart.
These people, these faces,
These are the ones I once knew.
My friends, my family,
How can I let them go?
To let them fade away
Into the unknown
To let them pass
Into the land of darkness
Where no man has seen
To leave them behind as I go on,
Would be to tear my own heart out
And live a life half complete
Always half empty
Missing a vital part of me
Don’t ask me to abandon the ones I love.
The ones you loved.
They are no more.
Forget this childish fantasy.
Stop chasing these elusive
Wisps of memory.
Life goes on.
You must go with it.
This path can only lead
To the land of shadow.
Follow your dreams
Not your heart.
It will take you beyond this life
To a place where-
Then I die.
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I really like the originality in this poem,its really different and that is why I enjoyed it so much! However I would have like you to fill in the spaces more! It gets very irritating for the reader to have to scroll down a long way down before getting to read the next line,and I feel like you should make use of punctuation, to make the poem better to understand! Nice work, keep writing!
I really loved this poem! There aren’t very many poems out there that I really connect to, but this is one of them. It flows really well without having to rhyme, which quite a feat. Usually I enjoy those kinds of poems over non-rhyming ones, but this one was different. I enjoyed the imagery you used to convey the message, especially in the beginning when you were talking about the running and trying to forget. I could imagine myself in that situation, and I have had those exact same feelings before. The end really wrapped up the poem nicely. Keep writing!!!
Hello again DragonLily! It is I, the great Griff, to review yet another of your works!
Wow. This is awesome. I love how you did this, displayed the argument about whether or not to die. I just...it's too good. At first I was wondering if it was Hades or the Grim Reaper or someone trying to convince someone why they should pass, but I think it really is just the person's thoughts? Not sure if I am right there, but either way, it is amazing.
The ending is simply amazing too.
I like it so much. It shows the acceptance of the person about to die, interrupting the final statement of the persuader.
Overall, I don't think you need to fix anything. This was really good. Nice job.
Keep writing and being amazing!
~GC
I love this so much! It's like a mind going back and forth between whether it should live, or if it should die. It's a very beautiful, very dark piece, and it can often be the very case in some people's lives. I really do love this and I wish that words would come to me, so that I could be able to explain my love for this better, but alas, they evade me. But, DragonLily, this is an exceptional piece.