Mr. Quirk(Chapter 4)

Hey Forever!

RandomTalks here with a review!

I really like the different approach to this chapter. It took a surprisingly relaxed pace compared to the previous one and I feel like what had been missing for me until now has finally showed up. I like how you takes us inside Mr. Quirk's mind and give us a glimpse of what is going on there. We understand him on a different level here, and we finally get the introduction that was absent from the first three chapters.

I like how this entire chapter was told completely from his point of view. This way we understand his confusion of being accused of such a crime, his frustration at having police protection at all times and the lingering doubt at the back of his mind - did he really make this happen?

I was also a little surprised that they had not made further inquiries 60 years ago when the 5 men had died mysteriously. It was the job of the police and it seems rather careless the way they ignored it at that time. Not very dutiful of them. The entire situation is a little perplexing. What did Mr. Quirk invent that is now causing so many people across the country to randomly drop dead? I am really curios about where this is going.

That is all. Keep writing and have a great day!

Hi ForeverYoung299,

Mailice here with a short review!

I am positively surprised about the chapter. I like how you used a different style to describe a little bit what happened and why Mr. Quirk is so important for the story and the state.

You've also managed to add a good pace and a great structure with this chapter that makes it very easy for the reader to read. The reading flow is good and it makes sense how you jump from one point to the next. The transitions through it are understandable.

From the perspective of the plot, I like the fact that new information is given and you also learn more about Mr. Quirk. Already his train of thought, where he thinks he loves his country and in the section before that, where they talk about an incident, shows me - if there is a concrete connection - that he is not guilty for his actions, but works more for the good.

A really good chapter with a nice change of pace. Something like this can be inserted regularly between a lot of plot-driven dialogue to give the reader a bit of a break and more or less build up an understanding of what has happened. What I also liked was the combination of Mr Quirk now being in the house and you using that to tell the story through the descriptions.

Other points that stood out to me:

24 × 7 Governmental

that someone went to the kitchen to bring a fork

He was suspected to have passed his 'creativity' to the enemies.

about 60 years ago which had killed 5 people in the vicinity. No proof had been gathered at the time but at that point of time he had invented something unknown and 5 people died.

A lot of wild thoughtsvwhich he had never thought conquered him.

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: Okayy....this is continuing to get even more mysterious here and I love it....with every chapter it looks like we learn a couple of new details only to have a lot more questions get added to what's happening here and how its happening.

Anyway let's get right to it,

It seemed like a daydream as well as a nightmare to Mr. Quirk to have a 24 × 7 Governmental protection in and out of his house. As the nature of the attacks was still unknown, it was not bad to have people always surrounding, especially when the ever-mysterious attacks were misfortuning the people who were alone. The newspapers would print everyday that someone went to the kitchen to bring a fork and was found dead; someone went to the garden and the same happened. On the other hand, being called for questioning now and then was as annoying as having a houseful of strangers to a recluse which he was already facing. He was suspected to had passed his 'creativity' to the enemies. As there was no definite proof, he couldn't be arrested but that was quite similar to that of a house arrest.

The Government and so the countrymen said that he had invented something about 60 years ago which had killed 5 people in the vicinity. No proof had been gathered at the time but at that point of time he had invented something unknown and 5 people died. The government laid an easy connection between the two. None had paid any attention at that time and now they were enduring the result.

However, he couldn't recall anything like that. All he knew was that he came to this house 60 years back. He had suffered many doubts at that time about his past but it was concluded that he had a memory loss for some incident– an unknown incident. I too love my country, he thought, I too want to protect it.

A lot of wild thoughtsvwhich he had never thought conquered him. Was he the devil behind all of these? But he really didn't pass anything to the enemy. Did he do it 60 years back? Was he such a bad man to do all these? He tried to make another theory. Perhaps, if he had passed it, he didn't do it intentionally. Or it was— “No! Not another one!” he shouted at the robot who stood emotionless jn front of him holding a piece of paper which said ‘You will present yourself at the Police station for a questioning session’