The soul held Freznel's hands in his hands. "Close your eyes." he said to Freznel. They both disappeared from the lonely house. Kappa and Theta were shocked to see them disappear.
They reached Marldon's house.
"Open your eyes." said Marldon's soul. Freznel opened her eyes.
"EEkk!" she uttered in shock.
"Cool down, my love." The soul relaxed her.
"Welcome to my house... eh, sorry for the dirt!" said the soul as he folded his index finger and moved it on his hair.
He then pointed to the broom. The broom automatically started to sweep the house. Within no time, the whole house was clean. Freznel looked at the floor. She could see herself in it. But there was no image of Marldon. She looked by her side. She could see him. She realized that a soul can't form mirror images.
Marldon held her high in the air. She felt as if she was supported by just a beam of light.
Then he laid her on the soft brown coach.
He sat by her side, very close to her. He moved his hand in the air and there appeared a glass full of green cold drink with two straws in it. The drink was made from raw mango.
Both of them sipped the drink from the glass.
"I missed you so much, Marldon."
"I missed you too, Freznel."
They talked and talked for hours. Then, she jumped out of the sofa and said, "Marldon, I will make cookies."
"Ah! Yes. I missed your cookies very much."
She went in the kitchen and within half an hour she was ready with the cookies.
Marldon extended his hands. Freznel moved it away and said, "No-no! I will feed you with my hands."
"I'd love that!" said Marldon's soul.
She fed him with her hands. She felt a force pulling the cookies off from her hand when she took them near his mouth.
She felt very strange during the initial days with him. Then she got used to it.
Days passed by. Both of them were happy.
One fine day, Freznel brought two cups of coffee to the sleeping soul of her beloved Marldon. She ran her fingers through his dense hair. Marldon woke up on her soft touch. She smiled at him and sat on the bed by his side. He rose and sat upright.
They began having the coffee. They laughed as they talked.
"Marldon..." said Freznel.
"Ha, yes my beloved girl?" said the soul with a voice full of love.
"I want to..."
"Yes, yes."
"Oh, I am getting shy!" said Freznel as her fair cheeks reddened slightly at first and then grew more and more intensely red.
"I-I want to become a mother of your baby." said Freznel.
Marldon coughed as he heard Freznel saying that.
"Take the coffee slowly!" said Freznel as she moved her hands on his back.
"It's okay... but-but... how can we have---a baby? I am a soul and you are a human..."
"No, no, no... I want a baby, I want a baby, I want a baby." said Freznel.
Marldon grew a little shy. It was for the first time Marldon grew shy. He was always quite daing, but today he grew shy.
"Okay, okay...but first I will have to go to heaven and ask my friends there if it was at all possible."
Marldon went up through the clouds and into the heaven.
He saw the group of his angel friends talking and chatting and having a good gala time.
He went towards his best friend and pulled him aside.
"What happened, Marldon?" said his friend.
"Sh.. quiet. Its a delicate matter." replied Marldon.
"Whats the matter?" whispered his friend.
"My love is saying that she wants a---"
"Wow, a baby!" his friend completed the sentence before Marldon could speak anything.
"But she is a human."
"Wow! Then you will have real, I mean human baby girls with so many supernatural powers!" said his friend excitedly.
"What? Is it possible?"
"Yes it is."
"Okay then see you!" Marldon left the heaven.
"Hmm.. so okay then. It is possible to have a baby girl." Marldon's soul told Freznel.
"No baby boy?" asked Freznel.
"No. It will be a baby girl only."
"Yaay!!" Freznel jumped up.
The soul united with a beautiful human lady for the first time in the whole history on the earth. After nine months and nine days, Freznel gave bith to a baby girl, Mahi, and the family of three lived happily. The baby girl grew very mischeivious and would playfully trouble her parents with her magical powers. Though she was mischeivious, she was kind and helpful and kept her origin a secret tale and never used her powers in front of anyone except her parents. Mahi grew up and was married to a prince in the heaven. After 70 years, Marldon's soul was accepted by God. He was then an angel who lived in the heaven forever. After Marldon's soul went into the heaven, Freznel soon died of old age.
There she met Mahi and Marldon and her son-in-law. Now she was also a fairy in th heaven. They lived in the fairy land of heaven very very happily. Freznel never ever looked back at her past terrible youth-life.
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The only thing I could say it that the end was kind of complicated but still so beautiful. I am glad that I read this story. Their unit and creation of that adorable baby girl was the most adorable part. I am glad that this story ends in such a beatiful end. You made it more like a summary even if I wanted things more indeep but it is okay this way too. I hope you are happy with this end also. I was sad when they were apart because he became an angel but in the end they were united together forever as a family in heaven which is the best end. Good job and hope to see more of you. The only thing I can say it that in 'Now she was also a fairy in th heaven.' you have one typo.
Glad to be your little reviewer. ~ See you soon.
I am glad that you liked the story. I am thankful to you for being constant reviewer and helping me, and correcting my mistakes from time to time.
Gotta learn many new things.
And, wanna read more of the Seventh Crown. Write it as soon as possible. xD
I am writing, no worries.
Wow, this is amazing! I love the amount of detail and personification used to describe the emotions of the characters. There weren't too many grammar, spelling, or punctuation errors, so that's pretty good. I enjoyed the ending to this piece, it is a very happy and just ending to a story like this one. I am a big fan of stories about ghosts, angels, things like that, so this story really interested me. Other than that stuff, It's Great!
~Ruby
Thank you for the lovely review, Ruby!
Thank you for the lovely review, Ruby!
Thank you for the lovely review, Ruby!