Hi there Elinor
1. What did i like the most in the poem Elinor is that For far too long I have lived my life in darkness.
I’ve waded my way through clouded, gray days
and long black nights. the stars and the glint of the moon
has its own sort of beauty, that’s true. Of late, I’ve come to
see these particular canvases for what they are,
flecks of beauty, of hope, of a respite from my mundane existence
always out of reach.
When what I want most of all is to feel the sun,
not just for a passing moment, but forever.
It will shine on me again, they say.
In the meantime I don’t know how much more of it I can bear,
For I am so cold without its embrace.
And yet, Elinor is was truly feeling like you can be yourself without any judgment.The sun symbolizes freedom and joy.It’s what you’ve looked forward to,waited for,desperately.It’s the thing you have longed to feel.Something you must have.Something sacred.Those are just my thoughts,anyway.I really liked reading this.
2. What do i think need to be improved Elinor is that i can say that this poem was about yourself because it say's here that you said If I ever tire of the stars I remind myself
that there are nights where I cannot see them and I know
that their absence is always worse.
If I ever tire of the clouds
I remember the summer when I was a girl and there was no rain.
The grass grew brown and trees shriveled up
in its absence and I longed for the cool touch of the clouds
to give us some relief.
I must remind myself that I’ve felt the sun before,
not just for short bursts, false starts or teases, but truly,
deeply felt it. so that's why i thought the poem was about you Elinor
Have fun writing!
Jay"
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