Hey, Elinor! RavenLord here with a review for ya.
This was some interesting commentary on societal expectations for women. I liked how you tied it all together with that age-old issue in the final stanza, and your use of line breaks was excellent. I have a couple critiques for you, however, so I'll get into that now.
Number One: The two "and"s in the second and third lines are a bit redundant. This is a teensy-weensy nitpick that you don't have to take too seriously, but I thought I'd give it a mention just in case.
Number Two: While I love the minimalist take here, I feel like the poem could do with a little more insight into the speaker's world. Perhaps some imagery of what she sees when she wakes up, describing her "modern girl" room and more habits?
I'm running on low energy here, so I'm afraid I don't have anything else for you today. Nevertheless, great job! There was something touching about the whole thing that I can't quite place. Very good work Happy RevMo and happy writing!
Wishing you the very best,
RavenLord
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