This Christmas

This is tremendously sharp and ruthlessly honest! Absolutely love your unusual take on Christmas. A-grade stuff! Outstanding to say the least.

Hello, ChipsMcCoy!

First off, while I do like the poem itself, I LOVE the message it gives! I like your original way of providing the commonly-heard message of not forgetting what Christmas is really about. The emphasis on Jesus is great. Christmas is after all the celebration of His birth, so a message in any way, shape or form reminding us of that is important, and I applaud you for that. One item that could have been added could have been something about telling people not to be too greedy or something along the lines of that, but what you did give was still done well. The way you divided the stanzas, using the italicized "This Christmas" was visually appealing though. Outside of the intro to each stanza, the flow and size of the stanzas are okay, but as said maybe a little more could have been added. But I'm no poetry expert, so I can't complain much about it. Regardless of size, the poem still packs a punch (a friendly and good one!).

So overall, the poem and its message are fantastic, you did a good job. It was well written, and should serve as a good reminder to everyone who celebrates Christmas of why they really should celebrate it. If you plan on making any other holiday-themed poems such as this, be sure ot let me know and definitely post them on here. Great poem, keep up the good work!

Hi there!
Let me just say... I love this poem! You've got some wonderful truths here, and I like how, in this particular poem, you chose not to cover them in rhyme. It works here.
I have just a few little nitpicks:

For the first 2 stanzas you had three lines, then after that you had 2. I would either go with one of the other. It seems like something is missing after having those 3 lines, then suddenly shortening it to 2.

When you said:
"HO HO HO",
The comma actually goes inside the quotation marks.

Other than that, I have nothing negative to say. I really like the ending, by the way.

~WritingforHim99

Yesss, thank you for this lovely, truthful poem!

I like this poem, but I don't really get the last part though. I've already knew the story about Jesus being betrayed with a kiss, but how is that relate to replacing Christ with an "X"?

I'm just asking, though!

I approve of this poem. ^.^

Hey, this is Cat. I just wanted to stop by and say that this is a lovely poem. I may not be a Christian, but I still think this just great. I like the parallels between Santa and Jesus. It's very deep and also very simple and short. The last stanza is pure brilliance, by the way. And I especially enjoyed the lines:
"Aspire to give out of the kindness of your heart,
and let sharing become a lifestyle,
not a gesture for a day."
I think the message is one everyone could take a lesson from.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year!
~Cat

I love this! It is very unique from other Christmas poems. I am a Christian and love seeing things like this. I like how you compared Jesus and Santa. The fact that you focused on the important things is great! The last line was really clever. Great job! Keep up the good work!

That last line was fantastic!!! For anyone who really knows the story Jesus, that is very clever, putting in that little bit of information correlating to when he was betrayed.

I love that you also address Santa. Many people forget The real meaning of Christmas and focus a lot on him, so the fact that you brought the real reason into retrospect bye ruining Santa is very nice.

Your poem is very religious. There's nothing about elves, reindeer, bells, anything. You look at the underlying reason of the holiday without anything dressing it up, an that is nice to see. It's a simple poem with a powerful story and message behind it. That alone is something that many Christians like myself admire and like to see. You're focusing on what's important. That's what I enjoy.

Technicality is great. Excellent work.
Merry Christmas, and God Bless
~Maddie