Dental Awareness

hey there..ChipsMcCoy..
I really liked your style of writing; using separate paragraphs to highlight the various scenarios and also it is successful in creating the mystery in the mind of the readers about the reason for the grinning and finally in your last paragraph you just burst the bubble and simultaneously bring in the thought among the readers about the importance of dental hygiene and the routine checkups that are required to keep it healthy.
Nice work..keep it up!
All the best

hey there..ChipsMcCoy..
I really liked your style of writing; using separate paragraphs to highlight the various scenarios and also it is successful in creating the mystery in the mind of the readers about the reason for the grinning and finally in your last paragraph you just burst the bubble and simultaneously bring in the thought among the readers about the importance of dental hygiene and the routine checkups that are required to keep it healthy.
Nice work..keep it up!
All the best

Hey. prithamrittika is here for a short review. I'm not much good in writing reviews. Well, the poem is very nice and short. I like short poems. I like this lines much,

"He grinned when he had an electric shock.
He grinned when he was struck by lightning.
He grinned when he fell off a horse.
He even grinned when his house fell apart."

Though this lines has no rhythm but this lines are simple and nice. I also like the line,

" Some people thought he was crazy. "

Overall the poem is nice. As I told you that I like short poems so I like your poem too.
Keep writing...

Hi, chips. Here's a short review for your short poem.

I found the title good. The beginning seemed good to me,too. The setting is good, too. But there really wasn't any rhyming,right?

I think that rhyming is an important part of humor poems. A little stupid or funny words can be used to make the poem funnier. "shock", "lightning", "horse" , "apart"- I think there should have been a rhythm in the words. It goes the same for the end. I would love it to be - A, B, A. Like, in the last line, you could have used a word which rhymed with "crazy"

This is all I would say to you. Anyway, I did like the poem and this is why I reviewed.

hahah, I love this

That is a first-rate poem. The writing is outstanding and the ending is hilarious. It just proves that you should be scared when you go to the dentist.

*clap

i thought this poem will be all serious and stuff but the ending made me go wow!!!! It is well constructed and looks good keep up the good work !!!!

Oh man. I am never, ever going to stop loving the humor in your poetry. Keep writing <3

Ok:

But what they didn't know was,
His dentures were just too tight.

The "h" in his should be lower capitalized.
Same for:
never stopped grinning;


He grinned when he had an electric shock.

I also liked your last paragraph.
Sorry that this was short, just no much to say.