the butterflies in my stomach
had flown away.
there was no more space
for beautiful things to grow within me.
i didn't get any water or nourishment,
but i still grew.
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First off, I like the title of this, it's very cute. May I ask why the lowercase letters are intentional? I have some ideas, but I don't want to be completely wrong. Yes, while this is short and could definitely be added to, to create a well thought out "story" if you will, the shortness is nice. Short and sweet as the saying goes.
It makes you wonder why the narrator feels dead inside, obviously growing on the outside as a person would. If you decide to write more to this let me know because it seems like it could get interesting.
xoxo,
GossipGirl
Cute! Just here to give a tip.
This was realy cute to read! But it would be great if you made it longer. This is something that can easily be made longer and more intresting for readers. Also for a poem try added the title "Gardens are for loving" into the actual poem, its just something that would make it even better.
Also you forgot a few capital letters such as "the" at the very begining. and remember allways capitalize the letter I.
Just some tips
Sophie <3
Thank you, the Lower case letters are intentional x
I loved this its so CUTE!