Strong does not mean limitless.
Bones sometimes break,
And so did I.
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Hello there, here to review.
I'd like to congratulate you because this was a very good poem and you conveyed your message with so little words. Your poem has a very good flow and the story connects well with the title, which I must say pulled my attention. I see absolutely no grammar or spelling mistakes; your text is impecable. However the only thing that I question is whether you should or shouldn't put any punctuation in the second verse, but then again I don't think that is a mistake but rather you own choice.
So again congratulations, your poem is awesome, and I'm sure your next ones (if you keep writing) will be awesome as well. So good job, and keep writing,
Even though it was just three lines, the ending was such a plot twist toward what I was expecting to read. I thought it was going to be some confident poem to remind someone to be strong. But instead, it admitted that we do brake, because you did. The size of it compliments it, getting straight to the point, but still totally engaging and creative. Great job.
-Percybeth
Kitty, here to do what I was meant for - review!
I like how this was short, and how the title related to the poem consisting of 3 meaningful lines.
Although, a genre would definitely be useful. I know that picking genres is hard from experience unless you have specific genre in mind. That, of course, is on thing.
Let's go through the three lines, and see if the are really perfect or kind of needs improvement.
Okay, we know that. Well, we should or most of us do at least. Even so, I like how you used "limitless" and not some other different kind of work. That puts other poems on a different level from this poem.
I'm sure everyone hates how I constantly say "why" "why" "WHY", so I'll give you a break to make sure the poem stays short and simple.
First of all, I enjoy how this is related, but completely off or random too, in a good way. You didn't use a chain of words to make your head ping the this line. Instead, you thought of it right on the spot. That hints a good poet.
Here's my why of the poem to you? Or more rather a "how". Er, both...
In case you hate me and my horrendous questions:
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And there we have the finished product of my review. If you were to improve thanks to this, I'm glad I helped.
My rating:
9 1/2 / 10
Great job! This wasn't perfect, so I had to take a half point off, but otherwise, AWESOMEEE!
Keep writing!
~Kitty
Hey there! For so few words this poem has a lot of meaning to it. Question though, did you mean bones or bonds? I just wanted to make sure I am reading how it is meant to be. The first time I read it as Bonds then paused seeing it was Bones instead. Either way its good and both words would fit nicely in the poem.
"And so did I." That there is the strongest impact of your poem. It doesn't matter what "broke" in someones personal life. I believe we all be there one point than the other.
Good job and keep up the good work!
Knight Dragon, here to review!
I must say that, for being so small, this poem is pretty good. So all of my review will be technical things.
First off, with the title, titles are typically capitalized all through (with the exception of a few words). I feel like it would read so much better as "I Am Not Limitless" (and without a period on the end). It would just help firm up your title greatly.
In the actual poem, perhaps a comma at the end of line two would help with the reading. I realize that the second and final line are extremely interconnected, but they have two different fields of thought in the same degree, you might say. The first is a general statement, and the second brings it down to earth and makes it personal. So having a comma there would give enough of a mental pause for the reader to process the general statement and be ready for the transition to the application.
That is the reason behind the suggestion, but it is just that: a suggestion.
Hope this helps!
Hello there, here to review.
I'd like to congratulate you because this was a very good poem and you conveyed your message with so little words. Your poem has a very good flow and the story connects well with the title, which I must say pulled my attention. I see absolutely no grammar or spelling mistakes; your text is impecable. However the only thing that I question is whether you should or shouldn't put any punctuation in the second verse, but then again I don't think that is a mistake but rather you own choice.
So again congratulations, your poem is awesome, and I'm sure your next ones (if you keep writing) will be awesome as well. So good job, and keep writing,
-Alfonso