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*completely rewriting this because it was old*
Hello~
If you haven't seen me around, I'm fortis!
I love reviewing poetry.
You really don't have to read this next stuff if you don't want to.
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I usually try to review the things I think you need help on. If I think you need the most help with your rhythm, I may spend the entire review on that rhythm. If you don't want me to review something in your poem, or if you want me to focus on something specific, please specify.

Sometimes, I can't be extremely helpful. That's usually when I think you have a perfectly wonderful poem already, and I can't think of a way to make it better. That may also be a time when your poem confuses me so much I don't understand it enough to give you concrete advice.

My reviews range from really long, to a short paragraph. The length depends on how much advice I have to give. It also depends on whether or not I can express myself clearly. (Sometimes I dither on about what exactly I was feeling, and I can't do it, but I spend way to long talking about it, sort of like right now.)

Sometimes I review line by line, sometimes mistake that needs lookin' at by mistake, sometimes I just review it. This also depends on what I think would be the most helpful. (if I have a thought after every single one of your lines, I may do line by line. These reviews tend to be longer.)

Fair warning: I sometimes tend to focus on literal meaning a little too much.

As you can see from those examples, I always try to praise something, and give advice about something.

The speed at which I will get to reviewing your poem varies on my mood and motivation. I will get it done eventually, if not quickly.

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I'd love to see you actually attempt to fix the things I reviewed. I understand if you disagree with what I say, but usually I can tell the difference between "I was too lazy to edit my poem after you reviewed, but not too lazy to ask for more reviews," and "there are reasons for not editing the poem the way you suggested."
and of course I don't mind a review on any of my stuff, but I don't mind if you don't review it.

Also, I "like" the review requests that I have finished, fyi.
Last edited by Rook on Sat Jul 18, 2015 5:48 am, edited 2 times in total.
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COULD YOU PLEASE REVIVIIREW THIS FOR ME?!?!?!?!?!

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IT HAS BEEN UP FOR AHES WITHOUT REVIEIWIWIERING.

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Thanks! I only recently began writing poetry, so I absorb constructive criticism like a sponge. Don't be afraid to be harsh.

So here it is: Gift of the Angel or Devil?. Will review something of yours in return!
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Hello fortis'!

Put these up today and haven't gotten anything yet, and I wrote them in a style I don't usually use, so I could really use feedback. Feel free to tear them apart, they aren't particularly personal and I do need help with them. I'll put them both here, your choice.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=108417The Sound of inspiration

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=108415Grey as Running Ink

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@rhiasofia I will get to those soon. I haven't been in a very review-y state of mind lately, but I WILL get to those. If I haven't by Thursday, please come and yell at me.
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Hey, please review for me?
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Fort! Can you please review this for me? :D

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Can you please Review this for me! Thanks!

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Could you please leave a review on this?

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Thanks! :D
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Am I a fool? Well seriously?

A review OR LIKE would help.

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All them done! :D
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To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!

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Could I get a review on Through Her Eyes?
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Oh Miss Fortis! May I please get a review? :) Thank you very much. Conform
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Anyone else? *roars in hunger*
Instead, he said, Brother! I know your hunger.
To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!

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Erm, I have two that I think could be worked on:
Ode to Braces (I know you already read this, but do you think anything could be changed?)
It's Better
and this I randomly wrote, and I feel I could add onto it. I don't want you spending the entire time on what could be added ;) (but I know you'd probably have some awesome ideas)...thanks fortis! I'll definitely give you some points if you help me out :D
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