fortis' Poetry reviews

Rook · 2013-07-27T15:33:39Z

*completely rewriting this because it was old * Hello~ If you haven't seen me around, I'm fortis! I love reviewing poetry. You really don't have to read this next stuff if you don't want to. I usually try to review the things I think you need help on. If I think you need the most help with your rhythm, I may spend the entire review on that rhythm. If you don't want me to review something in your poem, or if you want me to focus on something specific, please specify . Sometimes, I can't be extremely helpful. That's usually when I think you have a perfectly wonderful poem already , and I can't think of a way to make it better. That may also be a time when your poem confuses me so much I don't understand it enough to give you concrete advice . My reviews range from really long , to a short paragraph . The length depends on how much advice I have to give. It also depends on whether or not I can express myself clearly. (Sometimes I dither on about what exactly I was feeling, and I can't do it, but I spend way to long talking about it, sort of like right now.) Sometimes I review line by line , sometimes mistake that needs lookin' at by mistake , sometimes I just review it. This also depends on what I think would be the most helpful. (if I have a thought after every single one of your lines, I may do line by line. These reviews tend to be longer.) Fair warning: I sometimes tend to focus on literal meaning a little too much. As you can see from those examples, I always try to praise something, and give advice about something. The speed at which I will get to reviewing your poem varies on my mood and motivation. I will get it done eventually, if not quickly. The price? I'd love to see you actually attempt to fix the things I reviewed. I understand if you disagree with what I say, but usually I can tell the difference between "I was too lazy to edit my poem after you reviewed, but not too lazy to ask for more reviews," and "there are reasons for not editing the poem the way you suggested." and of course I don't mind a review on any of my stuff, but I don't mind if you don't review it. Also, I "like" the review requests that I have finished, fyi.

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Sat Sep 13, 2014 2:12 am

Rook says... · Sat Sep 13, 2014 2:12 am

Done! Bring on the requests! I want moaaar!

Instead, he said, Brother! I know your hunger.
To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!

-Elena Passarello, Animals Strike Curious Poses

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Sat Sep 13, 2014 4:10 pm

Noelle says... · Sat Sep 13, 2014 4:10 pm

*gives fort moaaaar*

This is the second "real" poem I've ever written (I'm just now learning the inside outs of poetry) so any advice you can give me would be awesome! It needs much work :3

Trapped Along the Way

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Fri Oct 17, 2014 2:51 am

bluewaterlily says... · Fri Oct 17, 2014 2:51 am

Hi Fortris, if you're not busy and still taking reviews could you review a new poem I posted? Here's the link Monument Thanks!

"A poet is, before anything else, a person who is passionately in love with language." - W.H. Auden

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Sat Oct 18, 2014 1:30 am

Rook says... · Sat Oct 18, 2014 1:30 am

Done!
Anyone else? Can't get my first blue star without poems to nom!

Instead, he said, Brother! I know your hunger.
To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!

-Elena Passarello, Animals Strike Curious Poses

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Tue Nov 11, 2014 2:40 pm

TimmyJake says... · Tue Nov 11, 2014 2:40 pm

Heyyyy, Is.

I know this isn't exactly poetry, but I really need help with it and you're a poetry expert. Do you review song lyrics? If so, link is below. If not, just skip over this request. ^.^

A Moment With You

Thank youuuuu

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Tue Nov 11, 2014 6:09 pm

Rook says... · Tue Nov 11, 2014 6:09 pm

Yes I do review Lyrics. ^-^
I'm on it, @TimmyJake!

Instead, he said, Brother! I know your hunger.
To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!

-Elena Passarello, Animals Strike Curious Poses

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Sat Jan 31, 2015 2:08 pm

Mea says... · Sat Jan 31, 2015 2:08 pm

Can I beg a review off you? This is my first attempt at poetry in years.

A New Year's Contradiction

Thanks!

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I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS.
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Sat Feb 14, 2015 9:02 pm

Rook says... · Sat Feb 14, 2015 9:02 pm

Finished! Anyone else?

Instead, he said, Brother! I know your hunger.
To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!

-Elena Passarello, Animals Strike Curious Poses

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Mon Feb 16, 2015 3:13 am

TimmyJake says... · Mon Feb 16, 2015 3:13 am

Why is Widdershins doing Fortis' reviews? o.o

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Mon Feb 16, 2015 3:34 am

Rook says... · Mon Feb 16, 2015 3:34 am

Shaddup, or request a review.
My notifs said you had requested one. Imagine my disappointment when I found nothing for my claws to rip apart.

Instead, he said, Brother! I know your hunger.
To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!

-Elena Passarello, Animals Strike Curious Poses

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Thu Feb 19, 2015 1:15 am

haven235 says... · Thu Feb 19, 2015 1:15 am

Mind reviewing two? If not, the first one please.

Sowing Seeds

Dear Princess

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Sat Apr 04, 2015 8:33 pm

paula08 says... · Sat Apr 04, 2015 8:33 pm

Hey

Can you review this poem for me please?

Placebo

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Sat Jul 18, 2015 5:49 am

Rook says... · Sat Jul 18, 2015 5:49 am

le bump

Instead, he said, Brother! I know your hunger.
To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!

-Elena Passarello, Animals Strike Curious Poses

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Sun Jul 19, 2015 4:47 pm

Lightsong says... · Sun Jul 19, 2015 4:47 pm

Hey. Please review my poem. The Religion of Education

"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

- David L. Ulin

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Wed Jul 22, 2015 3:58 pm

Prakash says... · Wed Jul 22, 2015 3:58 pm

Hi,
Can you please review my poem, 'The soldier's kiss'?
I got already some positive reviews, but I want someone to criticize my work. Be harsh!

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