fortis' Poetry reviews

Rook · 2013-07-27T15:33:39Z

*completely rewriting this because it was old * Hello~ If you haven't seen me around, I'm fortis! I love reviewing poetry. You really don't have to read this next stuff if you don't want to. I usually try to review the things I think you need help on. If I think you need the most help with your rhythm, I may spend the entire review on that rhythm. If you don't want me to review something in your poem, or if you want me to focus on something specific, please specify . Sometimes, I can't be extremely helpful. That's usually when I think you have a perfectly wonderful poem already , and I can't think of a way to make it better. That may also be a time when your poem confuses me so much I don't understand it enough to give you concrete advice . My reviews range from really long , to a short paragraph . The length depends on how much advice I have to give. It also depends on whether or not I can express myself clearly. (Sometimes I dither on about what exactly I was feeling, and I can't do it, but I spend way to long talking about it, sort of like right now.) Sometimes I review line by line , sometimes mistake that needs lookin' at by mistake , sometimes I just review it. This also depends on what I think would be the most helpful. (if I have a thought after every single one of your lines, I may do line by line. These reviews tend to be longer.) Fair warning: I sometimes tend to focus on literal meaning a little too much. As you can see from those examples, I always try to praise something, and give advice about something. The speed at which I will get to reviewing your poem varies on my mood and motivation. I will get it done eventually, if not quickly. The price? I'd love to see you actually attempt to fix the things I reviewed. I understand if you disagree with what I say, but usually I can tell the difference between "I was too lazy to edit my poem after you reviewed, but not too lazy to ask for more reviews," and "there are reasons for not editing the poem the way you suggested." and of course I don't mind a review on any of my stuff, but I don't mind if you don't review it. Also, I "like" the review requests that I have finished, fyi.

Rook

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Wed Jul 22, 2015 11:47 pm

Rook says... · Wed Jul 22, 2015 11:47 pm

Done! Bring 'em on!

Instead, he said, Brother! I know your hunger.
To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!

-Elena Passarello, Animals Strike Curious Poses

Hippyhoodrat

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Points 60

Reviews 28

Tue Sep 22, 2015 4:02 am

Hippyhoodrat says... · Tue Sep 22, 2015 4:02 am

I'd love it if you took a look at Open Wound in my portfolio. I'm a new writer and in desperate need of feedback. I'll be sure to take your comments into consideration and make the necessary changes. Thanks so much.

Lightsong

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Tue Sep 29, 2015 8:37 am

Lightsong says... · Tue Sep 29, 2015 8:37 am

Please review An Arrival Later Unwelcomed. *nervously handing the poem* o.o"

"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

- David L. Ulin

Poopsie

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Reviews 62

Tue Nov 17, 2015 7:07 pm

Poopsie says... · Tue Nov 17, 2015 7:07 pm

fort. I have a thingy here .3./

Glimpsing Infinity

The Poopsiest.

JOIN THE RABBIT SQUAD TODAY

I am 100 Percent Garbage

USED TO BE VERSER

¯\_(ツ)_/¯

Steggy

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Sun Dec 27, 2015 9:04 pm

Steggy says... · Sun Dec 27, 2015 9:04 pm

hola~

could you review this, please: internal problems

thank you. c:

You are like a blacksmith's hammer, you always forge people's happiness until the coal heating up the forge turns to ash. Then you just refuel it and start over. -Persistence (2015)

You have so much potential and love bursting in you. -Omnom

Codayy

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Mon Dec 28, 2015 3:51 am

Codayy says... · Mon Dec 28, 2015 3:51 am

Spiraling Down

I'm ready for slaughter. I haven't met anybody that ripped apart any of my poems. That is why I choose you.

Thanks in advance!

fukase

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Sat Jan 02, 2016 4:07 am

fukase says... · Sat Jan 02, 2016 4:07 am

I'd love to see your review on this. Thanks~

I love Koku.
He is damn cute and should be the main character
and not some lazy old man that supposedly genius but a sucker in his own life.
Koku is Koku.
Koku is CUTE.
~ B-The Beginning (A Netflix Anime.)

Pretzelstick

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Fri Jan 29, 2016 10:46 pm

Pretzelstick says... · Fri Jan 29, 2016 10:46 pm

me pwease

Seafoamy

A reader lives a thousand lives before he dies. The man who never reads only lives once
~George R. Martin
Life isn't about finding yourself; it's about recreating yourself. ~George B. Shaw

got yws?

Mea

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Mon Feb 01, 2016 9:50 am

Mea says... · Mon Feb 01, 2016 9:50 am

Hey....I kind of need someone to shred this for me. Thanks in advance. <3

In Memory

We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
-EternalRain

I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS.
-bluewaterlily

Meerkat

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Reviews 60

Sat Feb 27, 2016 8:36 pm

Meerkat says... · Sat Feb 27, 2016 8:36 pm

Hello, fortis!
Would you kindly review my poem Mon Dernier Amour?
Thank you for your consideration.

"Sometimes it is better to light a flamethrower than curse the darkness." –Terry Pratchett

RippleGylf

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Sat May 14, 2016 6:36 pm

RippleGylf says... · Sat May 14, 2016 6:36 pm

Could you please review https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/RippleGylf/I-Have-Learned-to-Hate-the-Dark-129234?

"Eternity, I hear you calling, but you will not have me yet."

Harker

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Mon Aug 01, 2016 5:45 pm

Harker says... · Mon Aug 01, 2016 5:45 pm

Hey, I'd love to have you review this thing: greek toxin.

You haven't gotten any requests via this thread for a while, but it's tagged as still accepting, so I'll try my luck. ^^

John. Queer guy, writer, fan of stuff.

~ Some men are born in their bodies, others have to fight for it. ~

yakitsa

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Fri Oct 14, 2016 6:00 am

yakitsa says... · Fri Oct 14, 2016 6:00 am

Hello hello hello,
this is my first published work on the website - not afraid to say
I'd really appreciate some feedback!
Thanks.

Life imitates art.

Tylexie

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Points 107

Reviews 12

Wed Aug 02, 2017 10:06 pm

Tylexie says... · Wed Aug 02, 2017 10:06 pm

Hello! I'm glad to finally find someone who actually likes reviewing poetry.

Could you review my poem, Fearing the Storm?

https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/Tylexie/Fearing-the-Storm-136855

LizzieH3

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Reviews 3

Sun Oct 15, 2017 9:03 am

LizzieH3 says... · Sun Oct 15, 2017 9:03 am

Hi, could you review my poem The Worry Child. I'm trying to progress as a poet and I would like both advice on the poem but also general advice based on what I've written which I can apply to other poems I write.

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