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Nicely done, W&W. I don't usually review romantic styled poetry, but I'll give it a go.
I like the shortness of it. It gives it a refreshed, new feel. Your flow is very good, but, I think the "and" on the last line sounds...odd? I am not quite sure... That is all I can really see here. Your poem, though short, has a nice feel and gives a good image.
Keep writing!!
~Rainn
First off, I'd like to say that the shortness and simplicity of this poem is refreshing. You were pretty straightforward with it.
However, I was confused about when you say that "it's only beating for me.", referring to your heart. And then you say that it is longing for thee. That is a bit contradicting. But I guess that you could mean your heart is beating for yourself as of now until you are united with your lover.
Other than that, nice job! Keep writing.