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A silver path is trailed with lace(,)
It leads me to a better place(,)
And overhead the sky is blue(,)
The flowers bloom with blossems(blossoms is spelled with a O.) new(,)
I walk into(maybe just in, not into?) persistent light(,)
The distance is an endless sight(,)
I walk on forever(this doesn't sound like the end, but I don't know how it should end.)
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