Tamagotchi Got Chi...PSYCHE!

by whence

Published May 17, 2007

In old poetry

"Forget You!", screamed behind hand
Your so nineties, I direct to your hand

Are you afraid of the dark? Or just boy bands?
Barred clichés suppressed by Gak in hand

'Ice Ice Baby ', echoes of abysm-soaked sand
held in palm of mind, electrolytes of hand

now gallops in the pick-a-number man
R-E-D spewed across B-L-U-E hand

Hey Arnold, from the skirt weilding land
football held by neck rather then hand

I'm breaking out my nostalgia-makin' gland
Signing off 'Remembered', with stale trend stained hand.

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Skye
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Skye wrote a review Review · May 20, 2007

How could I resist a title like this? ;)

The only complaint I have is the "hand/hand" rhyme in the first stanza. I realize it's a ghazal, and that rhyming can be scarce, but perhaps a little more can be done with this?

Nevertheless, I found this very enjoyable -- it spoke to the '90s girl in me, back when we partied like it was 1999! *boogies*

Sweet.

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oregongirl
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oregongirl wrote a review Review · May 19, 2007

Hey! :) This was pretty good. I thought from what you're trying to say I think you should make it longer. Well except for that it was pretty good. I had no idea what you were talking about but oh well :D Good job! :elephant:

something euclidean commented Comment · May 19, 2007

I like the "talk to the hand" reference and the title tons. I get such a kick out of this poem I'm not sure I have anything serious to say about it, though ;]

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whence
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whence commented Comment · May 19, 2007

I know bumps are frowned upon, but hasn't anyone anything to say about this at all?



It's easier to come up with new stories than it is to finish the ones you already have. I think every author would feel that way.
— Stephanie Meyer