What Keeps Us Alive
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We all have that fixation,
Our feeling's incarnation.
The probation of creation,
The vocation of mutation.
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A negation, a quotation,
Our ideas' inflation.
Our wishes in migration
To a better destination.
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In exploration of excitation,
Emanations of exclamations.
The incubation of imagination,
Or the meditation station.
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The formation of renovation,
The elimination of complications.
The consolidation of initiation,
Our thoughts in rotation.
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We call it inspiration.
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WOW. This is fabulous!
Firstly, I love your rhyming, I can't rhyme for anything. Seriously. You've made it seem really well done here, and it flows just right.
I love the line:
"Our thoughts in rotation." It's such an awesome way to put it! Some of your lines here are really memorable too, as you've worded them just right, short enough to remember, long enough to mean something.
Another thing I enjoy is how you've made it just one line to end on. It really makes it more powerful and sums up the poem! I LOVE IT!
Awfully sorry if this doesn't help, I'm not great at reviewing poetry! Great work!
-CFG
Thanks a lot for the review!
Thanks a lot for the review!
Hello, I am here to review your wonderful, little poem here. So to begin, I realize this was done on purpose, but I can't say I am a fun of all of your rhyming. Don't get me wrong, it was well done, I just feel sometimes you were grasping for something something that will rhyme. Although, the poem's opening is what really caught my attention, and led me to read the entire thing. It really like it when you pull the reader in, and almost make them feel they have to read it. Finally, the ending made me say to myself, wow that was quite brilliant. So it was overall good, there are some things I would change or work on, but to be honest it is your work, and you can make it however you want. Good job and keep writing
-Hsarver
Thanks again for the review Hsarver!
I know some of the verses don't make much sense but I did this more as an excercice to see if I could find things that would rhyme...
But thanks for the feedback!