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by mycocosm

Published December 30, 2013

In Poems

What is a person without a name?

What is a head without a face?

If we're not popular, we are nothing.

If we're unknown, we are ignored.

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Socitety today is changing our ways.

If we're not who they want us to be

We are no one.

A speaker without a voice,

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A story without a title.

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RainbowPowerPonies wrote a review Review · Jan 26, 2014

Review time CP21 here or PonyzandPokez!

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OMG This is the FIRST poem I have ever read that has gotten a PERFECT score from me!!! ^^ I LOVE this poem this is a wonderful poem and I love the message of it as well. I liked this and am fascinated with the fact that I'm in love so much with this! Like you cast a spell on me, I can't even pick a favorite line out of this! Actually I have a favorite part! "Society today is changing our ways

If we are not who they want us to be

We are no one."

Loved it!
~PonyzandPokez

Thanks a lot for the review PonyzandPokez!

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Jada3155 commented Comment · Dec 31, 2013

Ok so I'm not going to say that there was anything wrong because it was a great poem I loved what you where say like you where looking at the world in a whole other light like you see something must don't because you understand because things and people can change but you will not.

Thanks!

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GreenLight24 wrote a review Review · Dec 30, 2013

Hi. Review for ya.

I really liked what you were trying to say with this poem, and I think you got your message across very well. I'm not gonna nitpick at gar or anything because I believe that writers on this site are already well versed when it comes to things like that. Besides, I think the thematic and narrative aspects of a work of literature are much more important, especially when it comes to poetry.

Now then, as I said I really enjoyed the point you were making here and I think that it definitely holds true, especially in today's world. There's so much around us and so much of our lives are becoming more reliant on the herd mentality or the mentality of the group rather than the individual. I really liked the simplicity of this poem. It was short, but I think it holds more strength as a short poem. Very nice job! I can't find much of this poem that I didn't like!

-azulafanboy

Thank you!

TakeThatYouFiend wrote a review Review · Dec 30, 2013

Hello Alf (for short), here are your top three:
1-The length. I don't know why, but this seems to me to be the perfect length for this poem.
2-The content. It sure is nice to get a break from that overwritten subject, I refer, of course, to love.
3-The title. This is just beautifully original! I would read a poem with this title anyday.
3.5-That fact that I was listening to my favorite music while reviewing this.
3.55-Nice avatar!
This is usually the point where I comment on my favorite verse, but in this case it would be half the poem, and I can't decide which! For my favorite bit, re-read the poem.
Finally, I love the last line. (Cause it's self reflective an magic stuff like that)
Hope this helps
Take That You Fiend!

Thank you!



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