The Brightest Night
Light goes out and darkness comes,
Monsters run around in a pack,
A sinister melody through the wind hums,
And shivers run down my back.
It's a time of joy and a time of fear,
Creatures roaming through the night,
The full moon appears as the sky goes clear,
The darkest black and the brightest white.
The fangs, the claws, the hate, the love,
A Joker, a Jack, a King, a Queen,
The human, the demon, the crow, the dove,
Only in the night of Halloween.
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Hey, there, Alfonso! FireFox here to review on behalf of the Apple Dumpling Gang! To begin, I have to say: I love this piece!
I think you did a fantastic job capturing the essence of Halloween! It's one of my favorite holidays and you most definitely did it justice! Your lines flow nicely and there is no awkward rhyming and nothing sounds forced, which is wonderful. My favorite lines would have to be the last four. I love the comparison of the fangs, claws, hate, and love, the joker, jack, king, and queen, and the human, demon, crow, and dove! Those were so very clever to include! I feel that you could elaborate more on this piece! It almost seems like the prologue of a horror story! If you ever decide to expand on this, please let me know! There is a lot that you could do with this, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
-FireFox
Thanks FireFox!
Heya, I'm EmoChikXoX and I'm going to try and reveiw your poem!
You're a good poet, a really good poet so keep it up!
Firstly, I like your theme. Its original, and I think you wrote this poem at the perfect time with the halloween vibe still buzzing around. The poem starts off really rarther well but I think it started to faulter just a little towards the end.
I don't really like the listing that you have done towards the end, especially the part about the king and queen, and the love and the dove part... it dosnt really relate to your theme. Maybe you should have stuck to the sentences, but thats my personal opinion. But don't get me wrong the poem is really good
But anyways no punctuation or gramatical errors that I can see, or spellings either, so well done!
Happy writing!
~EmoChikXoX
Thank you! I'll take that into consideration for next time I write.
I like your poem!!
Halloween is a great holiday!
Hey there AlfonsoFernandez!
I really liked your poem and how you described Halloween
I loved it how you described the colorful and wide array of costumes. This poem gives a vivid image of Halloween in the readers' minds through simple words.
It's really simple and I love your use of imagery.
Really good job and keep writing simple yet such captivating poems!
~Gigi
Thank you!
Wow a brilliant description on Halloween
Thanks!
Wow! I really liked this! It was short but flowed amazingly. Poems like this are what inspire me to continue writing. A very nice poet you are indeed.
Thanks a lot! I'm glad you appreciate it.