Raindrop

Aww cute poem on a scale of 1 to 10 it gets a 9.9 from me. I loved the way if flowed and sound...lol even though I would have never though this would be coming from you....I guess you are full of surprises....keep up the good work!

I love this! Short, sweet and on point! Love the structure and the imagery! The stanza -

"The people are dancing

With one and another

With candle light prancing

Inside their glass covers."

is absolutely stunning on its own. I find it doesn't fall in with the story line you have created in this poem. It doesn't further explaining how the rain drops and stars know the town and the stories inside! The way you ended the poem was genius! Keep up the amazing writing!

This is really cute. It reminds me of the song 'raindrops' by regina spektor, have you heard it?
one thing I would recommend when writing poetry is to read it aloud, pacing up and down on each syllable, if your walking feels unnatural, the words probably do too. Not saying that this did't sound natural but there is ALWAYS room for improvement

In the second to last verse I think you could remove the s on covers, it improves the rhyme and its not strictly necessary!

Out of selfishness wanting to read more I think you should make it longer!!!!

Nice! I liked it because it was simple, unlike most of the poems on here which always dig in extreme depths.

Hello!
I really love this poem!! I really couldn't find anything besides the 'comma thing' that pendr pointed out. I like how you ended with the same lines!
"Smiling as now we know."
That is one of my favorite parts! In the beginning you wrote of how each raindrop has a story of their own, and in the end you wrote about how we no know it! Beautiful!! Keep writing!
-SnazzyPencil

Beautiful poem! I love the imagery! It brings so much peace.

The first thing I noticed, though, was that you put commas at the end of every line. I can see why (for pauses) at the end of lines, especially in the first stanza. But as it went on, it made it choppy and weird. Poetry follows all regular punctuation rules. Only put a comma when it's grammatically correct. There are some lines, though, that should keep the commas.

This is the kind of poem I like a lot. It's beautiful. You can picture everything that's happening. It's so fantastical, and it's different for everyone. You create the beautiful image in your head as you read the words, and those images usually create peace. It's awesome. This poem does that.

One other quick thing is instead of "Smiling as now we know," it might flow better as "Smiling as we now know." But it's your poem, it's your choice, and only do it if it would make you like it more.

Awesome poem! Thanks for sharing your art on YWS.

Hello there popo! how are you doing? hope your good.
This poem you wrote has an eerie feeling and I love the way you blend nature and beings into a simple wave. I like the fact that the meter of the poem was kept as simple as the whole context in the poem itself. I have also noticed that you did not concentrate much on diction but on the form and appearance of the poem. I also appreciate its appeal and how it could easily be understood by anyone.

"The stars are shining bright,

Gazing at me and you,

In their brilliant light,

Knowing our latest news. "

The second stanza lets me to deep contemplation because many interpretations could be extracted from these lines. You could connect it to a vague fate determining cosmic catalogue with the whole 'written in the stars' concept, least I take it that way well on the whole, loving the simple tone, meter and yet powerful mood. cheers! continue writing!