What's the point?
A question asked many-a-time,
a question asked for many-a-reason.
What's the point in trying?
What's the point in flying?
Each day we are faced with choices,
whilst we choose to with-hold our voices.
What's the point?
When the truth we know is not the truth,
or the paths we walk are not paths we want.
But then again...
What's the point in hatred?
Deciding what they're fated?
Why can't we just hold their hands?
Aren't we under our own command?
So tell me this!
What's the point?
Is it really what one wants to ask?
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Lol, a question that is often asked I will agree with you there. So Ms. Creativity what is the point of caring on if life isn't going right? Should we quit or keep going? In my thoughts I say keep going. It feels right to say something like god will not burden you with more than you can handle or something to that nonsense but you know right know I am struggling with my religious side right now, and I personally do not feel that way. I feel like, or better yet seen humans do spectacular and wonderful things. I have seen some one go from poor to rich, so whats the point of caring on........well I guess you have to live life and find out.
P.S. cute poem though I really like it
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Thank you and an interesting intake from the poem^-^
Thank you and an interesting intake from the poem^-^
if you have a broken pencil
Where's the point
You. I like you.
To start with, you title really caught my eye. I know I have started writing poems by this title many times, but they always end up with me staring at the wall misty-eyed.
Your punctuation is great, I know that many poets
myself includeddisregard punctuation in poetry a lot, because we don't believe it is needed. But sometimes it is actually needed, and I think you definitely used it properly in this work.So onto my nitpicks:
Right here, the first line is good, but the second line just sounds like you were short on rhymes. What are some other rhymes for 'trying'? Flying, dying, buying... I see what your problem was there. You might want to try to find something else that both rhymes and makes sense.
I feel like instead of 'hold' you should use 'withhold'
after that you seem to lapse out of rhyming every two verses for a couple lines, why is that?
Other than those few little things, I think this is great with a lot of solid ideas.
Keep on Writing
The rhyming theme was just kind of a layout that I created for my poem. I chose flying because of a thing I read where it was like "what if I fall? Oh but what if you fly" But I get where you are coming from. I'll apply all of these now. Thank you ^-^
What's the point? Impressive title. Though the poem is not seeming like a poem but a debate. But points you took are genuine as it happens in our daily lives. Seldom we ask these questions to ourselves spmetimes . Bu truly saying . I like the title . Rest poem is fine. Keep writing and you'll be more polished. Though I myself is very raw but its just a suggestion in the review. Blessings!
What's the point? Impressive title. Though the poem is not seeming like a poem but a debate. But points you took are genuine as it happens in our daily lives. Seldom we ask these questions to ourselves spmetimes . Bu truly saying . I like the title . Rest poem is fine. Keep writing and you'll be more polished. Though I myself is very raw but its just a suggestion in the review. Blessings!
Thanks, I did write this late but I do need to polish it so thanks for pointing it out and liking the title. I recommend reading over your review before you post it so you can get rid of typos
Oops sometimes*