Mummy?

This is Kaos here for a review!

The structure of this poem was interesting, it felt like more of a sequence of letters than a poem to me in this format. I noticed that you changed between what the speaker called their mother throughout the poem, which was a small but interesting choice to add to the poem. Onto my deeper thoughts, I didn't really think this did a lot new? We've seen the whole from-the-child's-perspective in bad relationships and everything of that sort before, and this didn't really add anything new to that idea for me.

The way of how the child speaks in the poem is hit or miss. Sometimes in the poem it feels like you're overdoing it. The reason that I said that this is more a sequence of letters is that it lacks a lot of poetic devices. There isn't really any imagery in the poem and it's mostly wrapped up in itself, but with the poem written in this style and formatted like this I don't know how you could squeeze imagery in. It's something that's literally not in the poem and it's different than when I say a poem lacks imagery because this doesn't have it at all. With it being written by the child does this, there's no sensory details or figurative language and that's something that I think you need to implement into the poem even if the child is doing it in simple terms.

What I mean by the voice and tone of the poem being hit or miss in greater detail is that, children aren't always like that or as sweet? I want more neutrality to the child, and in some parts you give this. We don't really get to know how old the child is and by the time three years have past I think that the voice needs to have a bigger change than what it has now to put more emphasis on it, but keeping some aspects.

I hope I helped and have a great day!

This poem gave me chills. I loved it as soon as I finished the first stanza. There isn’t much imagery, but that doesn’t take too much away from the story. I like how you can kind of imagine how the narrator is growing up throughout the poem. The last stanza was my favourite. It was a perfect closing to an amazing poem. The mood of the poem was perfectly set in the beginning of the poem, and was well maintained throughout the poem. This is an incredible poem, great work.

Wow this moved me. I love sad pieces and this really brought out that sad feeling with chills that I get when I read something really good like this. The ending is what really got to me. It was heartbreaking and you did a wonderful job at making the reader feel sad. This was a very good piece and I'm really glad that I read it. This was very unique and different from things usually see here. Can't wait to read more from you. Good job and keep writing!