*This story is underneath my folder titled “Alice and the aliens”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=117842&start=75. Enjoy!*
Giselle Hill’s heart raced so joyfully that she wouldn’t have been surprised if it burst right from her chest. She had just married Joseph Hill, the man she had grown suprisingly close with ever since she first met him at the cafè a few years ago. They had both already arrived at their beachside honeymoon hotel, the walls painted a bright, cheerful yellow and the balcony overlooking a crystal clear blue ocean.
She was looking in her suitcase for a change of clothes, because she wanted to wear something more comfortable than her wedding dress. Maybe a pink and white plaid dress would be appropriate for a day out. Yes, she’d pick that.
“I don’t think anything can ever be more blue than your eyes.”
Giselle paused. She hadn’t expected Joseph to make that comment, but it was still nice all the same.
“Oh, well-“
“Don’t be modest. Your eyes are as beautiful as they’ll taste, I’m sure.”
Joseph was always making odd jokes as apart of his personality, but she never thought that he had would say something like that, so she turned around and-
One hand clamped down hard on her shoulder and other reached out and pulled out her eye, blood spilling into her vision that was growing blurry and dark…he reached out for her other eye…
But why?
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I literally clicked and read this one so fast when I saw a mention of aliens and sci-fi because you've written so much creepypasta and horror, I was excited to see something a little different. I see this is part of an overall story you have going on, but this as a standalone story is really good. I was not expecting this line AT ALL:
Like DAMN Joseph you just got married! Maybe wait a bit before eating her eyes??
You tricked me into a false sense of security, which, knowing your stories, is entirely my own fault XD
This is so chilling. I want more gory detail! This must hurt, what is she feeling?
A VERY GOOD QUESTION LOL
I hope I wil find out the answer if I keep reading.
A really fun little short story!
Good afternoon 😉
Let’s read some more of the Aliens story :3
Maybe, in the first paragraph summary, you could have specified why the café was so special for your characters? To make it even more immersive ^^
Ohaaa I love how the innocuous line abt her eyes turns to “as they’ll taste”. I was shocked to read that, good job!
Tho ahhh this was happening so fast and no reaction from Giselle? Did she ingest a sedative or why is her commentary so neutral, all things considered? O_O
I also wonder why Joseph waited until the honeymoon to do this. Makes me wonder if the place itself has some significance or if he feared that at home there could’ve been interruptions….
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He was waiting to gain her trust so he can take them, as it wouldn’t taste as better if he went super fast. But I probably should have specified that.
Thx for reading!