They walked out of the room. The one, with her brown hair and pale complexion was sitting with her ladylove, talking about trivial things. Of course there was people around them. Her lady love was chubby and had a very wide smile.
Riley went over to their discussion. He was trembling.He glanced back at Augustus who gave him a goofy-but-assuring grin. Riley cleared his throat, which caused people to turn and look at the sightly cowering boy.
"Yes, Riley?" the girl asked, sitting up.Her lady love sat up as well.
Riley seen all the eyes on him, he began to close up a bit, his throat felt like it was tightening up.
Her ladylove spoke up, "Are you alright?"
"Yes.. I'm fine thank you Natalie," he said, he coughed into the inner part of his elbow.
Natalie smiled at him, "Get some water if need be."
Riley shook his head, then he handed the book to the other girl, "Here you go Alexandra.Math right?"
Natalie turned to her girlfriend, who took the book and was absolutely stunned.
"How did you?" she asked, then she saw Augustus. Immedietly she scowled. The other people sitting in that small crowd turned their heads and looked at Augustus, and only a few looked at Riley with astonishment.
Natalie took a deep breath and whispered, "You should run you guys."
Augustus stepped in, "Alexandra, please calm down. It's not good for you."
Alexandra's pale face heated up and she began to shake with rage. Natalie was shaking her head. The other kids were mumbling amongst themselves.Riley was watching the pretty boy, with some worry and amazement.
"It's not worth it," she muttered, "Just finish your lunch and we'll go into the court yard."
Alexandra was ignoring Natalie's suggestion. She was now intensely with rage.
"How dare you Augustus," she said, raising her voice, other kids began to look at him with anger. Natalie frowned and looked down at the ground.
"Who do you think you are?" she growled.
"Hmm , I don't know who do you think you are?" Augustus asked. She stood up and climbed over the other kids, who went silent.
"Listen to me boy," she started, "You better shut your mouth."
"How about you be nice to Riley for once-" Augustus said, shaking his head.
Alexandra snapped her fingers. Two really strong boys got up from the circle, cracking their knuckles. Riley knew what those guys would do to Augustus. So quickly, he ran over and grabbed Augustus and made a run for it. Pulling the pretty boy with him, he ran down the hallway, running past teachers and ran outside to a hidden exit.
Soon enough they were outside in the baseball field. Dark gray clouds were looming overhead.
"Why did you do that? We have to go back there!" Augustus yelled sharply.
"They were gonna hurt you," Riley cried. He was panting.No one had ever turned so sharply against Alexandra without getting really badly hurt. She was once nice and sweet, but she became power hungry, and it was terrible.
"Who cares!" Augustus said,"I can get better!"
"I do!" Riley cried out. And that's when the rain began to pour.
"Come on, I have to get you out of here," Augustus said, taking off his hoodie and putting it on Riley. He pulled the hood up on the shorter boy. Augustus lead him to his car and unlocked the doors.
Riley climbed in. The rain fell harder and harder. Augustus also got in. Before he put his key in the ignition, he looked at Riley who was facing him. When Riley saw that he was looking, he pulled the hood off and pushed his hair away.
"Thank you," Riley said, his large brown eyes glowing with happiness.
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HEY ash! DDemi here to review your novel chapter!

First of good job!!!
They walked out of the room. The one, with her brown hair and pale complexion was sitting with her ladylove, talking about trivial things. Of course there was people around them. Her lady love was chubby and had a very wide smile.
I'm really glad that you took my advice and gave 'the one' some physical appearance! really that makes it a bit better!
the first para was okay, a good way to start the second installation, there is just one error i find there and even that is very minor. you just need to change the "was" to "were".
Riley seen all the eyes on him, he began to close up a bit, his throat felt like it was tightening up.
okay so here, i really couldn't understand what u wanted to say, but my best guess is that all the eyes were on Riley and he started feeling nervous. right?
If i'm right then you would want to re-phrase that line.
Change it to [b] ...Riley seeing all eyes were on him, began to close up, his throat started tightening as if suddenly some was trying to choke him..."
and, uh, put space after full stops.
so that's all about the nitpicks
i like the way you end your story, pretty dramatic eh? i like dramatic anyways.
so Alexandra turned to be that high school-bi**h who despises everyone eh?
i really like it! *rubs hand*
only one request from my side...
plz describe the face of ur characters specially Alexandra and Augustus a bit more thoroughly?so yeah thats all for today
~DivergentDemigod
(&phangirl)
Heya!
Here I am for the review for this amazingly awesome work!!
This was an amazing story. The things are going smoothly. I am enjoying the story. Just a small nit-pick:
It should be "There were people around them."
Rest... everything is very beautiful. I like how the story is progressing. The flow is wonderful.
Keep writing...
And notify me when you release the next chapter. The novel is gonna be funn!:D
yoo sorry for the wait but the new chapter is coming out soon :00000000000000